User:Anthropologygirl/Double V campaign/Sharkbait27 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) anthropologygirl and dwkenyon22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Anthropologygirl/Double_V_campaign?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Double V campaign

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The article has a great lead sentence. A lot of information left out from the original first paragraph; not sure why. Some of it added to a different paragraph instead but could at least introduce it in the lead. New lead paragraph is very concise- could add a little more info to better explain what the rest of the article and subsections will be about. The "At Home" section could have a little more info since the lead sentence talks about the home front. All content added is relevant to subject. Content added is neutral and comes from reliable source. No bias or persuasion towards one side or the other. Content added and existing article is organized much better now. No grammar mistakes. No images added. I think the article is more complete than the original.