User:AntonioZDiaz/Pain management during childbirth/Ucredpanda Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

AntonioZDiaz, Nikki98765, Yeltawil


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AntonioZDiaz/Pain_management_during_childbirth?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pain management during childbirth

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

Links in first sentence may not seem necessary. Case management for treatment seems a bit of a stretch.

What is outlook?

"Tension increases pain during labor" seems kind of out of place

First paragraph e.g. "Virtually all pregnant persons worry about how they will cope with the pain of labor and delivery." seems kind of subjective and would like to see a citation of some survey study or something

Do "natural methods" need quotes?

Second paragraph about importance of pain is confusing. All pain has some purpose?

History:

Like a citation for historical sentiments

Preparation:

"It is possible to take a childbirth class, consult with those managing the pregnancy, and writing down questions can assist in getting the information that a woman needs to help manage pain." needs a grammatical look and gendered language scrutiny

Question whether Escott et al need to be mentioned in writing vs. a citation. The block quote isn't wiki like

Link to Bonapace method if such page exists

both... and

Do not need to mention the quality of data/study in wiki

Non-pharm:

Need more citations for waterbirth

Pharm:

Need citations for opioid section

Last sentence about valid questions seems opinionated