User:Apirah.n/Sustainable agriculture/Mymywg Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Apirah.n


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Apirah.n/Sustainable_agriculture?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sustainable agriculture
 * Sustainable agriculture

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? No, the lead does not include a snippet of the barriers of sustainable agriculture. I recommend just including a sentence to summarize you will cover some barriers.

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? The barriers regarding sustainable agriculture is relevant to the future of sustainable agriculture. It is important to know why this way of life is not how it is today.
 * Is the content aded up-to-date? The content of the article is up-to-date are all from the 2000s.
 * is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? I don't think there is missing content. The content added is does not go into too much detail it provides a reader a peak at the negative effects of pesticides on the environment. All the content belongs in this section because it provides insight on the business view of more environmentally sound agriculture options.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wiki equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? The article does not deal with Wiki equity gaps. The article "Influencing factors of and driving strategies for vegetable farmer's green pesticide application behaviour" by Yun Teng from the Northeast Agricultural University, Harbin, China. Including research from other continents other than North America helps cover underrepresented populations. Additionally, "Toward carbon neutrality in the agri-food sector: drivers and barriers" by Alessia Acampora provides a women's insight of the topic.

Tone and Balance


 * Is the content added neutral? The article is neutral, both perspectives are covered. The farmers need to make a living off their produce and the green initiative would be more costly to implement their green pesticides. This way the farmers are goals are shared to understand why they might not be making the most ethical decisions from an outsiders perspective.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No, there are no claims that are heavily biased towards a particular position. There are facts to back up solutions to barriers such as financial incentives. I don't think this is heavily biased it is a potential solution to decrease the barriers to sustainable agriculture.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? I believe there are no viewpoints overrepresented or underrepresented. Information regarding barriers are facts and not written persuasively. The solutions are not advertising any services.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favour of one position or away from another? No, the content does not persuade the reader in favour of one position. There are facts regarding the topic of the section which describes the negative impacts of agriculture on the environment which are facts. Additionally, information about solutions are provided which are supported by facts.

Sources and References


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes, all new content is backed up by reliable secondary sources. This seems to be a popular topic and many reliable scholars have created articles regarding the topic of agriculture sustainability and this comes along with challenges that are commonly discussed.
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? Yes, they do. However, the sentence "To move toward sustainable agriculture, farmers are encouraged to utilize green pesticides, which causes less harm to both human health and habitats, but would entail a higher production cost" I think only requires a citation from "Influencing factors of and driving strategies for vegetable farmers' green pesticide application behaviour" by Yun Teng. This article the only article that speaks on green pesticides. "How to Identify Barriers to the Adoption of Sustainable Agriculture? A Study Based on a Multi-Criteria Model" by Junior Barbosa does not provide information about how specifically green pesticide would cause less harm to the environment.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes, the sources are thorough. There seems to be a lot of articles with lots of relevant information on sustainable agriculture because it is very relevant today.
 * Are the sources current? Yes, the sources are current. There are 12 resources and all of the are published in the 2000s.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? Yes, there are a diverse spectrum of authors. A woman author wrote "Toward carbon neutrality in the agri-food sector: Drivers and barriers" this provides a perspective from a historically marginalized community. Additionally, the article "Influencing factors or and driving strategies for vegetable farmers' green pesticide application behaviour" by Yun Teng is from a research from the Northeast Agricultural University, Harbin, China. Countries outside of North America are normally underrepresented so it is beneficial to get information from else where, such as China.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? There is an article called "Opportunities and Challenges of Sustainable Agricultural Development in China" by Jingzhu Zhao which can provide further information regarding China's experience with sustainable agriculture. I think you covered a lot of the most significant bases and you also included many reliable resources. So not much to add. Just some additional resources if you want.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes, the links I checked worked.

Organization


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes, the content is very well written and easy to read. In the opening paragraph when you list the 3 dimensions of sustainability maybe you can summarize why each element is significant. Then create 3 paragraphs to go more in depth to each of them. Overall, you designed it so it is an easy read and flows nicely.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? No spelling errors but some grammatical improvements can be made:
 * "Barriers to sustainable agriculture involve the three dimensions of sustainability: social, environmental and economic dimensions.[1]" add a comma after environmental.
 * "Cooperation and collaboration between farmers is necessary to successfully transition to sustainable practices with minimal complications.[2]" use "are" instead of "is".
 * "The use of public policy, advertisements and laws that make sustainable agriculture mandatory or desirable can be utilized to overcome these social barriers.[5]" add a comma after advertisements
 * "Pesticides are widely used to combat pests that can devastate production, and plays a significant role in keeping food prices and production costs low.[2]" no need for a comma after production.
 * "To move toward sustainable agriculture, farmers are encouraged to utilize green pesticides, which causes less harm to both human health and habitats, but would entail a higher production cost.[1][3]" use the word cause instead of causes
 * "resulting in the reluctancy to switch from conventional practices." use the word reluctance instead of reluctancy.
 * "Conventional agricultural practices since the evolution of technology has caused significant damage to the environment..." use the word "have" instead of "has" because practices is plural.
 * "disrupted ecosystems, poor water quality, among other harms." add "and" before "poor water quality".
 * "Incorporating local produce and agricultural education into schools, communities and institutions..." add a comma after "communities".
 * Also, you don't need to cite "How to Identify Barriers to the Adoption of Sustainable Agriculture? A Study Based on a Multi-Criteria Model" by Junior Barbosa, 2 sentences one after another. Just include it to the last sentence and it is implied that this quote is applied to the previous sentence as well. Same thing with all the other citations.
 * Is the content added well-organized? Yes, I like that you introduce the 3 main points you want to cover then break them down. I think it can use more of an opening section and get into the details of the 3 elements (if I'm being picky). If you don't want to include a small opening paragraph separate for the 3 paragraphs getting into the details you can make subheadings of the 3 dimensions of barriers below the header barriers.

Overall impressions


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? How can the content added be improved? Yes, the addition of barriers involved in sustainable agriculture is very important to include. Most people would probably wonder why we don't implement these changes that would help the environment thrive. The explanation about these barriers answer this question and provides facts. It is important to get people thinking about how we will break down these barriers in the future to improve our way of agriculture.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? The strengths are educating the readers on what is preventing us from a more sustainable way of life. These factors good to know when shopping for grocers. Reader may be more inclined to support businesses who are putting in the extra money to buy green pesticides because their values are to reduce pollution even if it is not helping with their profits.

Additional Questions


 * Does your peer have 5-7 reliable sources? Yes, you have 12 great sources.
 * Does the topic link in some way to our course material? Yes! This is exactly what we covered in class about sustainable living. This is also closely related to Earth's resources and how humans interact with these resources. Additionally, what problems come along with humans using these resources.
 * Does your peer add historical context to their article? Yes, based on history of pesticide pollution this information provides insight to the negative consequences of using pesticides.
 * Based on what you know from course content, what do you think Wikipedia users should know about this topic? I think Wikipedia users should know that our system is flawed because we don't prioritize a sustainable life for our future generations. Additionally, people such as farmers are put into a situation where they may have no other choice than to contribution to this pesticide pollution because the green pesticides are so expensive. This is a recipe for disaster. This may be a biased opinion, but the facts are inline with this notion.

Overall, very good job! I find this research very interesting, good choice of topic.

- Maya Wong