User:Apocketfullofsunshinee/Mac Miller/TL Scarred Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Apocketfullofsunshinee


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Apocketfullofsunshinee/Mac_Miller/Bibliography?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_bibliography
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mac Miller

Evaluate the drafted changes
When it comes to you article body edits, I feel as though (not in a bad way) these are some simple edits which are beneficial to the improvement of the article and adding more information that would be helpful to readers. One of my favorite edits that you made was simply just adding the name of "Reuben Mitrani" which a reader could want to dive deeper into. Also, I do feel as though two sources used on such an insignificant part in his life such as the Pittsburg hip hop awards does not need all the links that you gave it. The personal life where you add the past relationship with "Nomi Leasure" I feel is a little too much, and could be condensed, such as removing the prom and where they moved. I am not saying the information isn't valid but instead I am saying that it is maybe too much. But, the Ariana Grande addition I feel is something that is a great addition to this article. The sources used in the edits are very credible as though these are common music websites, that cover the news, and have first person accounts of certain events. Overall, I feel like you article draft is actually good, but could be great with just a few revisions, keep up the good work and good luck!