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Article Evaluation for Drama:


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * Most of the information in the article was relevant to the article topic to me. It provided background information, summary of the novel, where the author got inspiration for the graphic novel, controversial topics that are presented in it, main characters and their roles in the book, and more. I do not believe that anything distracted me. The information presented in the article actually gave me more information to help understand the background of the story and what the story meant to the reader. It also gave me a useful bit of information, where it said that the author wanted this to be a high school book, but Scholastic found it more appropriate to be in a middle school setting. However, the summary felt a little long and unorganized.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * I do not believe much information is out of date, but I do see that the last date included in the information regarding the Banned Books List of the ALA was in 2014, which could be updated. I also believe that the authors of the article could have added more information about the cannon, regarding how it failed on the final night after Callie had the confetti in her pocket and it went off before the show.
 * What else could be improved?
 * I believe that the authors could add more information that happened at the end of the graphic novel. They did a great job providing a summary of the first parts of the novel, but as it gets towards the end of the novel, they seem to leave some information out that could be helpful to those that are reading the summary. They also did not cite much information in the article and did not edit their article as well as they could have. They could try and trim the summary to make it condensed and more helpful.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * I believe that the article is not neutral, because they have two sections of the article relating to Berland, which shows some bias in the article.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * I feel that the authors did not represent the question of sexuality and gender studies as much as they could have, because in the beginning, they did not explicitly state the idea of exploring sexuality as one of the major themes and topics of the novel. I feel they could have done a better job in showing how this was a major point rather than just "inclusion".
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * Yes, all of the links work and the sources do support the claims presented in the article.
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * Some of the facts were not referenced with citations, such as in the beginning of the article, they did not reference the American Library Association. Some of their citations, such as Berland, is biased and that is a large part of the article.
 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * There has not been much of conversations going on behind the scenes to represent this topic.
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * The article is not rated yet.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * Wikipedia discusses it in a similar way to the discussions we have had in class, because it talks about the controversy of the literature itself, about the novel and more. However, in class, we discusses more about the graphic novel genre more in depth and how it relates to kids and the messages that authors want to send to their readers. This article does not do this but focuses more on the novel itself without any information relating to the overarching genre. We also focused much more on the question of sexuality than Wikipedia did.

Article Evaluation for Rethinking Columbus - Tucson Unified School District:


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * I believe that most of the information in the article related to the article topic, Tucson Unified School District, because it spoke about the school district in general, various scandals that occurred in the school district, and the schools that exist within the district.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * The amount of students is out of date, because the latest record of students in the schools listed on the page is from fall 2012. I believe that there could be more background added about the Mexican cultural courses, because the article does not go into depth regarding what they taught the students and why legislators found it to be wrong to be taught in schools.
 * What else could be improved?
 * It could have more citations in the beginning summary of the article where they list facts, such as how many students attend schools within the school district, declining attendance at these schools, and more. I also believe more information could be added to other schools in the district and not just focus on Tucson High School.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * I believe that the article has a bias when it presents the information about the Mexican studies program, because it does not provide benefits from the program and how it helped students. It only speaks about the bad things, such as teaching un-American ideals, rather than focusing on how it taught students to value their culture. Additionally, I feel that the author attempts to make Tucson School District seem like a bad and failing school district, because they focus a lot on how students have been moving towards charter schools, how they have been losing many students over the years, and how some of their programs have come under fire from the public.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * I believe that the viewpoint of the Mexican students enrolled in the cultural program is underrepresented, because it does not provide any of the positives of the program, as represented in literature and documentaries that we have watched as a class. It solely focuses on why it came under fire and not how it impacted and improved the education and lives of many students who may not have done as well without the program.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * Many of the links work, however, some of them do not and lead to websites that do not exist. Despite these few links that do not work, I believe that the article is well cited with other information.
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * I believe that more citations could be added to the beginning of the article, in reference to the number of students that attend the school on an annual basis. However, the majority of the other facts are referenced with credible citations from reliable references that are mostly neutral. There was a piece of information provided about an episode of The Daily Show dealing with the school district, but they stated that it was satirical.
 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * People speak about how there is a lot of focus on Tucson High School and how the article should focus equally on the other schools in the district. Someone also listed more citations for the article, and someone added a health initiatives section that have been implemented in the school district.
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * It is ranked as a start-class article, which means it is a preliminary article with lots of room for improvement. It is part of WikiProject United States, WikiProject Arizona and WikiProject Schools.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * In class, we discussed the major benefits that this program has had on low-income students and how it has improved their education as opposed to just being in class, not paying attention, or not even going to class. Students were engaged and wanted to attend class to learn about their own heritage and culture. It prepare them for college and to succeed in the world. Wikipedia does not focus on these positives, but solely focuses on the controversy and how legislators have reacted towards the program. In other respects, Wikipedia brought up other challenges to the school district that we did not discuss, such as the "Black List" in the Tucson School District and other programs, such as health initiatives.

Article Evaluation for the article Indigenous Peoples' Day:


 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * Everything in the Indigenous Peoples' Day article seemed relevant and important to the topic. It provided background and history about the holiday and what prompted its origin in society. However, I do believe that some information was very repetitive and the article could be trimmed down to be more concise.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * Yes, some information is out of date. For example, in the article, it only lists 4 states as having celebrated Indigenous Peoples' Day, while the number of states that now celebrate Indigenous Peoples' Day is 24 states in various cities. I believe that the article could have more information on what individuals' do during the day and night to celebrate Indigenous Peoples' Day, in addition to just mentioning a pow wow in one city.
 * What else could be improved?
 * The summary in the beginning of the article is very repetitive and states numerous times that Indigenous Peoples' Day is celebrated on the second Monday of October, the same day as Columbus Day. I also believe that this summary is too long and could be limited as an easier way for the readers to have a general idea of what the article is about.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * I believe that the article is neutral in its writing. It does speak about what Christopher Columbus did and why some individuals now celebrate Indigenous Peoples' Day, but that is the nature of the article and has to be represented. I think that the article is giving facts rather than opinions, but could be seen as leaning more in favor of the indigenous people.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * I believe that a viewpoint that is underrepresented is why some states have not yet decided to celebrate this holiday and who makes the decision to celebrate this holiday. However, I do believe that the viewpoint of the indigenous people and their justification for the holiday is overrepresented and their opinions and responses are a majority of the information in the article.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * Yes, the citations that are listed all work in the article and lead to credible resources. The claims are all backed up with citations, except for one.
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * Many of the facts are referenced with appropriate references, except for one about mock trials of Christopher Columbus, but someone has pointed this out and wrote that a citation is needed. Many of the sources are from not biased sources, but others are from news sources that tend to lean right in the political spectrum, such as Fox News, and others are from not as well known sources and local newspapers. Most of these are neutral sources, but if they are biased, there was no notion made of that in the article.
 * What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * There are not many conversations occurring except for edits to be made to the page, such as having a separate section on the page for "Cities/States That Replaced Columbus Day with Indigenous Peoples' Day."
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * The article is rated as a B-class, meaning it has mid-importance and is a moderately developed article. It is a part of WikiProject United States, WikiProject Indigenous peoples of North America, and WikiProject Holidays.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * The way that Wikipedia discusses this topic is similar and different to the way that we have talked about it in class. Wikipedia gives a lot of facts about the holiday and what it is about, but fails to give any background about the indigenous peoples. In class, we discussed the holiday briefly, but we talked a lot about how Native Americans are subjected to a plethora of stereotypes and discover this through our readings of Rethinking Columbus and other literature. We have focused on how not to use stereotypes against different and various groups in society, but the article on Wikipedia just presents facts about the holiday and gives a small amount of background on the topic.

Article Evaluation for A Wrinkle in Time (2018 Film):


 * Does the article follow the basic format described in the handout?
 * Yes, the article follows the basic format described in the handout for film analysis of a Wikipedia article except for an "Others" section.
 * What does the article have/cover that is mentioned in the handout?
 * It begins with a lead section, has plot synopsis that could be shortened a bit, cast, production, release, reception, release, music soundtrack, and an infobox. According to the article, the plot summary should be a few paragraphs, meaning 3-4 paragraphs, but this article has the plot summary as 8-10 paragraphs.
 * What is missing and could be added to the article?
 * I think that not much is missing from the article, but I believe that the article could be reordered a bit. I think that the placement of the music soundtrack ruins the flow of the article and could be added to an "Others" section. There is not an "Others" section, but that could be added along with other awards and if there is going to be a sequel. The music soundtrack should be put at the end. Also, I think that the citation and information from Rotten Tomatoes should be removed, because Wikipedia says not to use those sources in the article. It could be replaced with a review, such as the one I found from NPR. I think that there needs to be more added to the Reception section and use more scholarly sources in their review section. I am also not clear about the bottom two paragraphs of the Critical response section, because they are not entirely positive or negative reviews, and I think that the reviews should be separated into a few positive and a few negative reviews.
 * I went onto Literature Resource Center (LRC) and found a movie review of A Wrinkle in Time conducted by National Public Radio (NPR). I also feel that the fact regarding the first woman of color to direct the first live-action film with a nine-digit budget should have its own section in the article.
 * "'A Wrinkle In Time' Will Delight Target Audience That Doesn't Have Too Many Wrinkles." All Things Considered, 8 Mar. 2018. Literature Resource Center, http://link.galegroup.com/apps/doc/A530668547/LitRC?u=wash43584&sid=LitRC&xid=d7acbd97 . Accessed 9 Oct. 2018.

Article Evaluation for Persepolis (comics):


 * Lead Section:
 * Although there is a lead section, I believe they could add more information about the book in general rather than information regarding the languages the book was translated into, the movie, etc. It also needs to summarize the entire article and information it is going to be presenting better than it already does.
 * Background:
 * It speaks about when the book was written in Satrapi's life, her experiences, and how she came to get the idea for the novels, but includes irrelevant information about the movie that does not have to explicitly do with the book's background. The awards that the book and film has received does not need to be in the background section.
 * Summary:
 * The summary for both Persepolis 1 and Persepolis 2 are way too long. They need to be condensed and not include such extraneous information or little details about the novels. Instead, they should include overarching main points that allow the reader of the Wikipedia article to get a general sense and idea of the books.
 * Genre/Style:
 * The article includes information regarding the graphic novel genre and those who also used the graphic novel genre in history. It does a good job doing so and also tells how Satrapi has used the genre throughout her works of Persepolis 1 and 2. They say that it is a non-fiction novel. However, they include some extra information to the genre and style by citing different sources about how she uses the genre throughout the novels, such as The Modern Language Association of America. They also include information that is relevant to the style and the way that Satrapi uses it throughout the novel. They also include an example of her style in Persepolis. They do not need this example and we could try and paraphrase it if it is necessary in the article.
 * Analysis:
 * There is no analysis section in this article. I think that there could be a section of analysis of the censorship of the book and the controversy around the novels as an analysis section instead of having such large blocks of sections.
 * Publication:
 * The publication history section is very confusing and unorganized. They also include multiple quotations of various phrases that could easily be paraphrased rather than quoted, as Wikipedia wants us to do.
 * Reception:
 * I believe that they do a fair job of citing the reception that the novels received from the public eye. I think that a lot of it could be condensed and shortened as well. In addition, they also quote many phrases from various sources that could be eliminated and paraphrased instead of just quoting directly, as Wikipedia wants us to do.
 * Film:
 * I think that this section about the film is okay, but they could add more information that was sprinkled throughout the article to this section instead of distracting the readers from the main purpose of the books. The film is not the central topic of this article, so it can be included at the end, but should not be in the beginning sections or throughout the article when they are attempting to speak about the books.
 * Persepolis 2.0:
 * I think that this section is acceptable. I think they do a good job at making the section concise and to the point as well.

New Contributions Draft for A Wrinkle in Time (2018 film) article:

I believe that the Ava DuVernay section should be placed after the production section in the article and the Reception section will replace the old one.

Ava DuVernay Director Section:

There has been much discussion regarding Ava DuVernay being the first African-American woman to direct a movie with a budget over $100 million. Many felt that Ava DuVernay was a great choice of a director, because she was able to correctly highlight the challenges imposed upon young African-American girls in society. There has been a lot of tension regarding women of color in the film industry, so many individuals were happy to see DuVernay as the director in order to break the stigma around the film industry and the bad reputation of being a individual of color. DuVernay then went on to comment on social media that she may have been the first to reach this milestone in the film industry, but she definitely would not be the last to do so either. Although the movie did not turn out according to plan and became a box office bomb, people were still happy with Disney's choice of director and the messages she portrayed throughout the film.

Reception Section:

Many regular movie-goers took to Twitter to express their positive reactions after seeing the film in theaters. User Jamie “I Am Meg Murry” Broadnax (@JamieBroadnax) wrote in her tweet that she saw the film for the second time and could not believe the visuals throughout the movie and the performances from various characters. Kat Candler (@katcandler) also stated that Disney's A Wrinkle in Time was a "gorgeous love letter to the warriors of the next generation ." Critics also had some positive reactions to the film, stating that the visuals were extraordinary and that the film "continue to make lasting impressions on innocent minds to change what it looks like to be a young black woman. "

However, other members of the public and critics of the film felt that it was too ambitious and did not live up to the expectations that were promised in the film. Others felt that the movie was truly not film-able and should not be turned into a motion picture. Conner Schwerdtfeger (@ConnerWS) stated that the movie was all over the place and underperformed, but DuVernay deserves praise for the attempt. Sean Mulvihill (@MessEnScene) proceeded to state that the film had no flow and although some moments "come alive" in the film, it could not save the movie. Critics also weigh in with negatives that they have seen throughout the movie. Some of stated that they have seen numerous inconsistencies from the film to the novel. Others have said that after halfway through the film, you find yourself not caring about the other characters besides Meg and that the movie seems to "drag" after this point. They also pointed out that although it may be a great film to take your kids to because of the messages it instills with quotes from Ghandi and others, it seems to disappoint.

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Revised Edits of my new sections/draft of new content:

Ava DuVernay Director Section:

Ava DuVernay's role as the first African-American woman to direct a movie with a budget over $100 million has received positive sentiments in the media industry. Oprah Winfrey, one of the stars in the film, was happy to see DuVernay as the director because the cast of the film and DuVernay herself broke barriers for individuals of color in the film industry. "So I do imagine, to be a brown-skinned girl of any race throughout the world, looking up on that screen and seeing Storm, I think that is a capital A, capital W, E, some, AWESOME, experience." Irene Monroe of The Cambridge Day expressed her feelings that Ava DuVernay was a superb choice of a director, due to the fact that she was able to correctly highlight and expose the struggles young African-American girls in society experience. DuVernay commented on Instagram that she may have been the first to reach this milestone in the film industry and foresees more women to do the same: "Maybe the first, but not the last. More sisters to come. Thanks to all who came out to see and continue to catch WRINKLE IN TIME in theaters! We’ve passed the $100m mark at domestic box office. Tesser well." Disney's choice of director and the messages DuVernay portrayed throughout the film still impressed movie-goers.

Reception Section:

Positive reactions were shared online after the film was released in theaters. User Jamie “I Am Meg Murry” Broadnax (@JamieBroadnax), a freelance writer and member of the Critic's Choice Awards, tweeted that after seeing the film for the second time, she still was unable to conceptualize and take in the visuals displayed throughout the film and the numerous performances from various characters. Kat Candler (@katcandler), an American independent filmmaker, also stated that Disney's A Wrinkle in Time was a "gorgeous love letter to the warriors of the next generation." Mercedes Howze of the New Pittsburgh Courier stated that the visuals were extraordinary and that the film "continues to make lasting impressions on innocent minds to change what it looks like to be a young black woman" and that the film displayed "black excellence on the screen."

However, the film also received feedback that it was too ambitious and did not live up to expectations. Conner Schwerdtfeger (@ConnerWS), former entertainment journalist for CinemaBlend, stated that the movie was "all over the place and underperformed", but that DuVernay deserves some praise for the attempt at filming the seemingly unfilmable. Sean Mulvihill (@MessEnScene), actor in "Living Luminaries: On the Serious Business of Happiness", stated that the film had no flow, and although some moments "come alive" in the film, it could not save it. Todd McCarthy of the Hollywood Reporter felt that the film was "unable to charm or disarm" the audience. Wenlei Ma, film and TV critic of news.com.au, stated that, following the halfway mark in the film, movie-goers find themselves "not caring about the other characters besides Meg" and that it seemed to "drag" in the latter half. She highlighted the film's disappointment, regardless of the value parents have found in the messages it teaches children via quotes from Ghandi and Nelson Mandela.

Most Recent Edits to A Wrinkle in Time (2018 Film) according to Shalor's Recommendations:

Ava DuVernay Director Section:

The decision received positive sentiments in the media industry. Oprah Winfrey was happy to see this because DuVernay herself broke barriers for individuals of color in the film industry. "So I do imagine, to be a brown-skinned girl of any race throughout the world, looking up on that screen and seeing Storm, I think that is a capital A, capital W, E, some, AWESOME, experience." Irene Monroe of The Cambridge Day expressed her feelings that Ava DuVernay was a superb choice of a director, due to the fact that she was able to correctly highlight and expose the struggles young African-American girls in society experience.

Reception Section:

Jamie Broadnax, a freelance writer and member of the Critic's Choice Awards, tweeted that after seeing the film for the second time, she still was unable to conceptualize and take in the visuals displayed throughout the film and the numerous performances from various characters. Kat Candler, an American independent filmmaker, also stated that Disney's A Wrinkle in Time was a "gorgeous love letter to the warriors of the next generation." Mercedes Howze of the New Pittsburgh Courier stated that the visuals were extraordinary and that the film "continues to make lasting impressions on innocent minds to change what it looks like to be a young black woman".

Conner Schwerdtfeger, former entertainment journalist for CinemaBlend, stated that the movie was "all over the place and underperformed", but that DuVernay deserves some praise for the attempt at filming the seemingly unfilmable. Sean Mulvihill, actor in "Living Luminaries: On the Serious Business of Happiness", stated that the film had no flow, and although some moments "come alive" in the film, it could not save it. Todd McCarthy of the Hollywood Reporter felt that the film was "unable to charm or disarm" the audience. Wenlei Ma, film and TV critic of news.com.au, stated that, following the halfway mark in the film, movie-goers find themselves "not caring about the other characters besides Meg" and that it seemed to "drag" in the latter half. She highlighted the film's disappointment, regardless of the value parents have found in the messages it teaches children via quotes from Ghandi and Nelson Mandela.