User:Apothecartea/Roxxie/Cmcopti Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Tina's @TeamTalonflame.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:TeamTalonflame/Roxxie?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
Everything that has been added so far seems to meet Wikipedia's guidelines, further establishes Roxxie as a notable figure, and proves why she deserves to have a Wikipedia page.

Lead

I believe there's a minor typo with "sport" in the lead, but everything else looks concise, relevant, and notable! I can link Roxxie and Girljock on my page and you can link J.D. March's on yours once published!

Content

I think the information you provide in the Background section is just enough to give us a sense of Roxxie without exposing her personal life. Her Career section is extensive and you overall have several fantastic, detailed lists of what Roxxie contributed to and created and where such works can be found.

Tone and Balance

Your tone is objective and clear. Information is concise and delivered in a swift, understandable matter. You discuss the content without injecting bias.

Sources and References

Just be sure to remember to go back to fix your references since they're currently a work in progress!

Organization

I like the way that this article is organized; there's only a small thing I would change and it's maybe to unbold the subheaders in the Career section since for me they distracted from the article slightly given they were the only bolded words. Otherwise, this looks wonderful and I very much look forward to seeing this as a completed article! You've put in a significant amount of work and you found plenty of sources that prove why Roxxie is a notable figure.