User:Appletree4life/Chemocline/Tommyj0127 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Appletree4life


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 * User:Appletree4life/Chemocline
 * User:Appletree4life/Chemocline

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Appletree4life,

One of the things you could do to help your paper is by adding a few more citations to your paper. One area that I think would be easy to add a few citations in your paper is in the first three sentences. A reader that doesn’t come from a scientific background may not know that information off the top of their head. By adding some citations here, it will help you get closer to the total number needed and help readers make connections.

One other way you could help your paper is by reworking some of the sentence structure to help it flow better. Some of the sentences had a few places where there was an extra word or a different word could be inserted to help it flow better. I’m guilty of doing this all the time and I figured this would be that little extra something that could help make your Wikipedia project that much better.

I think you did a great job on citing specific examples in your paper and it really helps the reader see the connections you are making with the scientific papers. You did a great job citing your sources and making sure they went to websites you got them from in the reference section of your sandbox.