User:AprilGa91962893/Fashion Revolution/Natasha14738 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? AprilGa91962893, Mary Mijares
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Fashion_Revolution&diff=prev&oldid=956719772

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?" Yes, mostly new sources.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?: Yes, but it can be worded better, such as "the fasion revolution."
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Yes, including a timeline!
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?: No, everything is referenced later.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?: It's a good size!

Overall criticism for the Lead includes adding more secondary and tertiary sources.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?: Yes.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?: Yes, there are events from 2020.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?: I would add policy changes that occurred due to the revolution, whether that's corporate social responsibility initiatives in the private sector or actions by governments involved.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?: The article discusses historically vulnerable individuals, such as those exploited for cheap labor abroad.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?: Yes, there are no "most" and other words with connotation.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?: The article gives you a timeline and then an overview of movements that lead the reader into supporting the movement, but then has a section for criticism to balance it out.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?: There should be more in the criticism section.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?: A little bit, but mostly because of the primary sources used.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?: Not enough secondary sources of information!
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?: Yes.
 * Are the sources current?: Yes, there is 2020 content.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?: Yes, there's plenty of women of color authors!
 * Check a few links. Do they work?: Yes.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?: Yes, but I think the timeline section can be edited a bit more. It is almost too concise, because sometimes I'm not sure who is the subject of the verb of the sentence.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?: Not any I can see as of now.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?: Yes! I would perhaps add a timeline to the Fashion Revolution Day/Fashion Revolution Week section, similar to the events section.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?: Yes.
 * Are images well-captioned?: Yes, but there is a lack of location descriptions.
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?: Yes.
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?: I wish there were more images in general, but the ones present are relevant to the section they are in.

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?: N/A
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?: N/A
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?: N/A
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?: N/A

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?: The article has more primary sources than before, and a very easy to grasp timeline. The addition of information for schools and universities is particularly effective.
 * What are the strengths of the content added?: The separation of the three movements within the article is very smart, but there is a lack of related articles/links for these movements.
 * How can the content added be improved?: I would add more images, more secondary sources, and related links to improve visibility of the article.