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Anti-Sweatshop Movement Page Response to Peer Reviews

EstabanMiranda, thank you so much for the insight you gave on our article. I completely agree with your points and will make sure that the events that we mention all tie into the Anti-sweatshop movement. We will make sure to read more into the social media platforms used during the anti-sweatshop movement and make sure they are relevant enough to mention. Once again, we appreciate your insight.

Nanaonwiki, thank you for responding to our first draft. I appreciate your letting us know that the history section’s tone is not encyclopedic since one of our main goals is to make the article sound less biased. We will make sure to go back and take out the descriptive language. I agree that the two criticism sections are redundant and we will make sure to combine them.

Thank you for taking the time out of your day and reviewing the Anti-sweatshop movement., Go-editors. It seems that you have read the actual Anti-sweatshop Wikipedia page and not our first draft which is completely fine. I enjoyed your insight as you noticed some things in the article that we did not. As other editors noted, the tone of the Wikipedia article seems biased and that is not something we caught! We will make sure to pay more attention and try to fix it. We will look more into how the media has been affected by the Anti-sweatshop movement and make sure it is a relevant section. Thank you so much again!

Rani Zhu, thank you so much for your well-written insight! I think we will add some illustrations to the page to have readers visualize the movement. Also, I think it was a great catch that there was no definition of “sweatshop” in the introduction. We will make sure to add that! Thank you so much.

Thank you Markowijaya for the feedback. While we appreciate the comments, we do want to clarify that your constructive feedback towards the two criticism sections in the Anti-sweatshop movement article is geared towards sections that we did not indicate previously to be a part of our plans for this Wikipedia assignment and did not make edits to. While the sections were edited previously before we started this project, we do agree with your comments and will look into how we as a group can make some of the changes you suggested, such as the confusion of two sections in the same article with the word “Criticism” in both.

Helen Pope, thank you for your feedback. We understand the concerns that you have brought up and would like to clarify that our Wikipedia project was geared towards adding a new section for the #WhoMadeMyClothes movement in this article, not editing the existing article. However, you along with some of our other peer edits have pointed to the confusion of having two criticism sections within this article, so our team will take into consideration potentially fixing some of the things that you mentioned, such as condensing the two criticism sections together.

Parouz, we appreciate the thorough feedback. This article certainly has room for improvement, and we have taken in some of your comments at heart for our next steps in this Wikipedia project. From your peer review, we believe that some of the next steps that we can take include: building more details in the lead paragraph to discuss some of the important stakeholders that you have mentioned, add more visualization to the page to improve the look of the article, scrub through sources to make sure that they are still available online and up to date, etc.

Fashion Revolution Page Response to Peer Reviews

Thank you Nanaonwiki, we appreciate you taking the time to give us some feedback. To clarify, our intentions for the Wikipedia project was to add a new section for #WhoMadeMyClothes, not edit what has already been written. However, we do see some of your comments to be relevant for the rest of the article and will consider making edits to what is already in the article. We understand that the timeline can be confusing for those who do not know about the Fashion Revolution movement, so we intend that in addition to adding a new section to the page, to also restructure what the page should look like to help new readers have a better understanding of the information.

Thank you Go-editors for your insightful review. We plan on adding an entire sub-section about the #WhoMadeMyClothes movement that will go in-depth regarding social media, so we can move that line into the section with the rest of our data. We are looking into making a timeline so that it is easier to read and hope to have it done soon! Thank you for the links regarding tone; we hope to neutralize the article and will be removing the ad-like details. Lastly, we will look for more images on Wikicommons that we can add.

Thank you so much, Natasha.Holdt for all the great suggestions! We will add the aim of the organization in the introduction to provide a clearer picture of the rest of the page. We agree that the history section needs work and have written material to add to it. We will also look into adding events from 2019 and being super up-to-date regarding Fashion Revolution Week 2020 as it is coming up this month and could provide more events for us to include. We can look into the Haulternative section to see if it can be incorporated into another part or had more extensive research done to build on it. That’s a great idea that we hadn’t considered! We appreciate all the insight and hope you check back in later to see our progress!

Thank you for the review, Jasdeep-SH! We plan on adding a section covering the hashtag movement and explaining the way social media impacted it. You make a great point to clean up some of the overlaps in the history and events sections, and we will look into fixing that! We plan on adding to the history section so it will be longer and not stick out as such a small section to the reader. We can add significance to the events in the form of a few sentences covering why the event was held and any results that came from it; this would be a great addition to the timeline we want to implement. We have also been gathering more credible sources in our goal to eliminate the bias on the page. Thanks for all the suggestions and we hope to complete them to the best of our ability!

We are looking into adding more sources so that every claim is backed up to a specific, credible source. We plan on making the hashtag have its own section so that it won’t need to take up space in the introduction and give it a place in the article that doesn’t distract from Fashion Revolution as an organization. The section will focus on the movement’s events and timeline as well as the role of social media within it. Thank you, Mary Mijares, for the review, and we plan on implementing your suggestions to the best of our ability!

Thank you so much for taking the time to provide feedback to our article Gobears15. Summarizing your points, we can improve the article by adding more information to the History section and making the Fashion Independence Day more direct, and also by organizing the Events section into a timeline format to make it easier for the readers to read. Actually, in our draft, we created a new History section with more information. However, we agree with all the points mentioned above and will implement the suggestions to improve the draft. Once again, thank you for your feedback.

Far out mate thank you for the detailed feedback. Your feedback is definitely in line with the other reviewers’ opinions. And we also agree with the feedback that you have given. We believe that you might have viewed the original article instead of the draft that we worked on. In our draft, we added a new section for #WhoMadeMyClothes and Criticisms, added more information to the History section and we also tried to eliminate the bias. Summarizing the points that you mentioned above, we will improve the article by explaining briefly the impacts brought by the movement and adding more information from credible sources. We will make sure that we do our best to follow your suggestions. Once again, thank you for your time and feedback.

Ziyuanzing, we really appreciate you giving feedback to the article that we are working with. We also agree with all of the points you mentioned above. However, we believe that you might have looked into the original article instead of the draft that we wrote. In our draft, we added a new section for #WhoMadeMyClothes, added more information to the History section and we also tried to eliminate the bias. Moving forward, we will make sure that we properly follow the suggestions listed above. Once again, thank you for your time and feedback.

Rani Zhu, we appreciate your feedback. We agree that the Fashion Revolution can be further improved. From your feedback, we believe that changing the format of the section by using sub-headers for the time of each event will help readers to better digest the information. We will keep these recommendations in mind as we edit our draft.

Thank you Helen Pope for the feedback, just to clarify, Fashion Revolution is the organization that initiated the movement of #WhoMadeMyClothes. We also agree that the History section should be improved and that we can add more information for the section. We have added more information and fixed the section in our first draft. However, we will keep your suggestions in mind as well.

First Draft of Wikipedia Article
One of the first things we noticed as a group is that #WhoMadeMyClothes does not have its own Wikipedia article. We proceeded to search through relevant articles and noticed no sections are covering #WhoMadeMyClothes. The two main Wikipedia articles we noticed lacking this movement as sections were Fashion Revolution and Anti-Sweatshop movement. After discussing with Professor Harris, we concluded that we will be adding a section to both these Wikipedia pages. The Who Made My Clothes movement is extremely relevant to both of these article pages. One of the main goals for the #WhoMadeMyClothes movement was to increase awareness of sweatshop workers and their conditions while simultaneously changing their conditions. Our plan with the Anti-Sweatshop movement page is to add a complete #WhoMadeMyClothes section with a picture of the poster from Creative Commons licensing and discuss the relevance to the Anti-Sweatshop movement. Next, we will set up a redirect to a section of #WhoMadeMyClothes in the Fashion revolution Wikipedia page. In this section, we will go more in detail about the movement’s origin from Fashion Revolution. Furthermore, we will add a timeline and criticisms section. Lastly, we will try to remove the bias flag that Fashion Revolution currently has on their page.

Updated paragraph for the history section:
Fashion Revolution was founded in 2013 in response to the Rana Plaza disaster in Bangladesh by Carry Somers and Orsola de Castro. Somers and de Castro both had experience in the fashion industry. For the previous 20 years, Somers’s fashion brand Pachacuti had pioneered radical supply chain transparency and de Castro had launched and run the pioneering upcycling label From Somewhere from 1997 until 2014. Fashion Revolution was designed as a platform for academics, designers, writers, retailers, and business leaders to encourage people to take action in the fashion industry. The organization is funded by private foundations, institutional grants, commercial organizations, and donations from individuals. Somers and de Castro launched the #WhoMadeMyClothes hashtag in 2013.

#WhoMadeMyClothes section:
The #WhoMadeMyClothes hashtag was launched in 2013 by Fashion Revolution co-founders, Carry Somers and Orsola de Castro. It became the number 1 global trend on Twitter. By 2018, the hashtag received 99.6 million impressions on Twitter and 170 000 posts were shared on Twitter and Instagram containing at least one of Fashion Revolution's hashtags. The goal of the hashtag was to bring awareness to consumers about the brands that they purchase from and raise awareness for the humanitarian and ethical issues in fast fashion. Garment workers in factories responded to the movement by participating with the hashtag #IMadeYourClothes.

The movement began in England and spread through social media. On Twitter, 31.82% of the tweets with #WhoMadeMyClothes were posted by users from the United Kingdom. The top 5 countries with the highest search activity and Twitter posts for #WhoMadeMyClothes were the United Kingdom, the United States, Germany, Canada, and France. Celebrities including Emma Watson, Kelly Slater, and Fernanda Paes Leme used the hashtag on Twitter to support the issue.

The movement also utilized YouTube to spread awareness. To promote the hashtag in 2015, Fashion Revolution released a video titled “The 2 Euro T-Shirt - A Social Experiment”. The video showed a vending machine selling t-shirts for 2 Euros. When people went to purchase the shirt, a video played describing the working conditions in which the shirt was made. By the end, people chose to donate to the cause of increasing supply chain transparency instead of buying the t-shirt. The video has over 7.9 million views. Their 2018 campaign film uploaded on April 22nd, 2018 was awarded the Best Green Fashion Film award at the Fashion Film Festival Milano and has over 54,000 views to date.

With the hashtag #WhoMadeMyClothes as the channel for the movement, Fashion Revolution has increased general awareness of the reality behind the garment manufacturing processes. With increased awareness, global fashion brands have started to increase transparency. The 2018 Transparency Index allowed fashion brands the opportunity to change and justify their supply chains. As of June 2018, 172 brands across 68 countries have revealed more information about their supply chains than in previous years. In response to the hashtag, #WhoMadeMyClothes, more than 3,838 global brands took to social media to respond with real information about their suppliers and workers.

Criticism Section:
Despite the public attention brought by Fashion Revolution, people remain skeptical of the movement’s actions and consequences. In an article written by The Guardian, Ruth Stokes, author of The Armchair Activist’s Handbook, says that meaningful change in the fashion industry can start with a Fashion Revolution Day hashtag campaign, but must go beyond it.

In 2016, various fashion brands criticized Fashion Revolution by questioning the methods that the organization and the website Ethical Consumer used for the Transparency Index. The index assesses the level of transparency and support for workers’ rights of various fashion brands by looking at the information released by the company and by distributing various questionnaires. In an article by Women’s Wear Daily, the founder of Fashion Revolution responded to the criticisms by explaining how the index was not meant to be a way to audit the companies but rather a way to assess the accessibility of the information regarding the supply chain processes of their product to the customers.

#WhoMadeMyClothes Wikipedia Plan
Articles: Fashion Revolution and Anti-sweatshop movement

Discussed with Professor Harris on 2/19/2020


 * 1) Update the anti-sweatshop movement Wikipedia page to include a section on our hashtag #WhoMadeMyClothes. This will include the motive behind the movement and any progress the movement has made towards reducing the use of sweatshops.
 * 2) Set up a redirect to the anti-sweatshop movement page or the Fashion Revolution page whenever people look up the hashtag #WhoMadeMyClothes.
 * 3) Edit the Fashion Revolution page to include sections on our hashtag, giving it a larger presence on this page. These can include a criticisms section, a timeline of the movement, and a broad overview of accomplishments. We additionally would like to eliminate the article’s bias and remove the flag.

Bibliography:


 * https://www.forbes.com/sites/susanprice/2018/04/23/how-two-entrepreneurs-became-unexpected-activists-and-started-a-fashion-revolution/#13d89d881d7a
 * https://fashioninsiders.co/features/inspiration/who-made-my-clothes-movement/
 * https://www.vogue.co.uk/article/who-made-my-clothes
 * https://www.dazeddigital.com/fashion/article/39880/1/who-made-my-clothes-fashion-revolution-mj-delaney-short-film-2018
 * Ferdous, Ismail. “Photography as Activism: The Role of Visual Media in Humanitarian Crises.” Harvard International Review, vol. 36, no. 1, 2014, pp. 22–25., www.jstor.org/stable/43649242. Accessed 25 Feb. 2020.
 * https://www.independent.co.uk/life-style/fashion/fashion-revolution-week-2018-rana-plaza-collapse-who-made-my-clothes-a8317756.html
 * Knošková, Ľubica, and Petra Garasová. “The Economic Impact of Consumer Purchases in Fast Fashion Stores.” Studia Commercialia Bratislavensia, vol. 12, no. 41, June 2019, pp. 58–70. EBSCOhost, doi:10.2478/stcb-2019-0006.
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 * Bartley, Tim, and Curtis Child. “Shaming the Corporation: The Social Production of Targets and the Anti-Sweatshop Movement.” American Sociological Review, vol. 79, no. 4, 2014, pp. 653–679. JSTOR, www.jstor.org/stable/43187558. Accessed 25 Feb. 2020.
 * John Miller (2003) Why Economists Are Wrong About Sweatshops and the Antisweatshop Movement, Challenge,46:1, 93-122, DOI: 10.1080/05775132.2003.11034187
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 * Ballinger, Jeff. “No Sweat? Corporate Social Responsibility and the Dilemma of Anti-Sweatshop Activism.” New Labor Forum, vol. 17, no. 2, 2008, pp. 91–98. JSTOR, www.jstor.org/stable/40343002. Accessed 25 Feb. 2020.

Option 1

 * Article title
 * Textile industry in Bangladesh


 * Article Evaluation
 * The introduction of the Wikipedia article shows good relevancy to the topic and touches upon the different statistics involved within how big and important the textile industry is to Bangladesh. It also includes some of the international organization policies as well as different diplomatic relations that greatly affect the area of topic and gives good background information of the stakeholders. While important, the information on the early history of textile production in Bangladesh is perhaps too in-depth where it distracts the reader with too much non-relevant information. Additionally, the employment section statistics should be more up to date. For example, the estimation of children engaged in child labor statistics should be more recent than in 2013. The report from McKinsey in 2011 that details how Bangladesh was the 2nd largest RMG manufacturer is helpful, but there could be a more recent report that would be more beneficial. It would also be relevant to see more than criticism drawn towards specific examples of companies about their involvement in such controversies. Perhaps a section about how they are improving these worker's conditions after these scandals would give the article a more neutral stance.


 * Sources
 * https://www.unicef.org/protection/57929_child_labour.html

Option 2

 * Article title
 * Fashion activism


 * Article Evaluation
 * The introduction was clear but very uninformative. It seemed to be missing information on the true definition of Fashion Activism. In the introduction, the authors briefly explain where the word was coined from. As of right now there is only one main section, “Fashion Design Items That Influenced Socio-Political Events.” Instead I feel like the authors can include a History section where authors can go more in depth on why the word or movement started and factors that influenced it. In addition, the last sentence in the introduction about Trump’s “Make America Great Again” hat seemed unnecessary and could be repositioned to the section where all the examples were posted. The three examples were clear and to the point. The authors lack more information and could use more sections. All the links tagged work. The authors also use a neutral tone and it did not sound like they were trying to convince the readers. The talk page is completely clear and has not been touched. It is also said that the article has not received a rating on quality or importance.


 * Sources
 * https://www.academia.edu/3681413/Fashion_Activism_-_Evaluation_and_application_of_fashion_activism_strategies_to_ease_transition_towards_sustainable_consumption_behaviour

Option 3

 * Article title
 * Fashion Revolution


 * Article Evaluation
 * The beginning of the article is relevant to the topic but further sections are not. They do not provide further insight into the movement or enhance learning about the topic. This includes the section that covers worksheets students have used in school on the topic. Additionally, the article is written in promotion of Fashion Revolution instead of taking a neutral stance on the issue. It could benefit from the removal of language that promotes the movement and the addition of a section that includes any drawbacks the movement may have. This could help neutralize the page’s content and change the page from promotional to encyclopedic.


 * Sources
 * https://issuu.com/fashionrevolution/docs/fr_fashiontransparencyindex2017

Article evaluation
I am evaluating the article Fashion Revolution.

The beginning sections of the article are relevant to the topic, but further down on the page there seems to be unnecessary information. While it is related to the topic, it does not provide further insight into the movement or enhance learning about the topic. This includes the section that covers worksheets students have used in school on the topic. The layout made some sections hard to distinguish the main points while reading and the page could benefit from the addition of pictures related to the topic.

The article is written in promotion of Fashion Revolution instead of taking a neutral stance on the issue. It could benefit from the removal of language that promotes the movement and the addition of a section that includes any drawbacks the movement may have. This could help neutralize the page’s content and change the page from promotional to encyclopedic.

The links to the citations work and the sources are able to support the claims being made. Facts are appropriately referenced, but not all of the information comes from reliable sources. Many links are from news sources like HuffPost, The Guardian, and Marie Claire, but some information comes directly from the Fashion Revolution website. This could create a bias in their writing, and it is not directly stated in the article.

There is some information missing because the movement continues to this day but the timeline and many of the dates listed have not been updated since 2017-2018. When my group was quickly learning about our topic last class, there seemed to be a plethora of information covering the hashtag, but that information is not reflected in the article.

This article is part of WikiProject Bangladesh and has a Stub-Class rating. Most of the relevant portion of the article is definitional and could benefit from the addition of new sources, more relevant material, and a larger overview of the movement’s pros and cons. There is not much going on on the talk page, especially recently.

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