User:Aqp24/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
I am evaluating the Wikipedia article entitled "Jennifer Laszlo Mizrahi."

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose the Wikipedia article of Jennifer Mizrahi by using the “random article” option. I pushed the “random article” button many times, but the article on Jennifer Mizrahi caught my attention because it was a biography about a woman activist, which I found admirable. This article matters because women many times are not represented, and the existence of this article contributes to providing representation. I also chose this article because it was a start-class Wikipedia article, which I had never seen before, and wanted to try my hand on identifying areas of improvement that I can then use to inform my own WikiEdu article assignment.

Evaluate the article
To commence my evaluation of the Wikipedia article of Jennifer Laszlo Mizrahi, I will first address its content. It is evident that there is some effort placed into crafting her biography, but it does not adequately encompass who she is and reads more like a resume. The article lists all of her credentials, previous awards, positions, publications, and accolades, which gives it more of a resume appeal. There needs to be more information about MIZRAHI, rather than only the things she’s accomplished (although that is important, too). Her “personal life” section, which falls at the very end of the article, is full of miscellaneous information; it says nothing about her childhood, early life, her experiences, career, her adulthood, marriage, health, legacy, etc. Likewise, the information that is presented in the article does not go into depth; it only scratches the surface. For example, the article mentions that Mizrahi publishes articles on disability issues, but does not go into details about what those articles contain— how those articles reveal something about her. Secondly, separate sections could be created that focused specifically on her journalism and her inspiration for her journalism as well as her personal philosophy. On my last note about content, I will point out that there is an entire section that lists the numerous awards that the program she created has gained. This does not seem as important of information as this article is primarily about HER. The information about these awards could specifically go on the Wikipedia article devoted to her program.

In continuing evaluation, the tone of the article seems to be a bit biased toward Mizrahi; it appears to learn toward subjectivity as it almost attempts to persuade the reader to support her and her life’s work in a subtle way. Small phrases such as “supports”, “known”, and “extremely active in raising awareness” seems to suggest that the person is writing in favor of Mizrahi, which violates the neutrality rule of Wikipedia.

In evaluating sources, there are a number of problems present. For one thing, the sources mainly consist of news coverage/press releases, opinionated articles, and random websites. In addition, the RespectAbility website is used, which is Mizrahi’s own nonprofit— thus the source is NOT independent of the subject, violating another one of Wikipedia’s guidelines. There also seems to be barely any peer reviewed articles. Likewise, the citations in the article are barely citations at all; they are simple bare links.

In order to gain more context, I looked at the Talk pages as well. It seems that no conversations are happening about the article.

Overall, I would rate this article to be underdeveloped. The language does not flow well, the structure of the article is not really organized, information is repeated, and many important pieces of information are left out. To improve this article, there would be a need to reorganize the information, find more credible sources about Mizrahi, and even rewrite the article as a whole so that it flows more clearly.