User:Aquakatze/Deaf Clubs/Hillarypatricia Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (Aquakatze)
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Aquakatze/Deaf Clubs

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? I feel like to context could done better.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? nope, i feel like could do a little more research by finding all history related to deaf clubs -- which location has set up the first deaf clubs? and is there's any left in this USA? or other countries.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? nope.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? nope
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? literally theres no details just explain the concept of deaf clubs.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? yes and need more informations.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? nope
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? no

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? yes and need more information on history and etc. because deaf clubs has came from a long line of history. my dad used to be one of president in Philadelphia deaf clubs back old days.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? no
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? no
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? no

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? there's no source at all - how do this support your statement on deaf clubs?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? no -- this is why i suggest you to research some more
 * Are the sources current? no source
 * Check a few links. Do they work? no links literally

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? yeah easy to read
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? umm no
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? not well organized - you could add background information, history, and how many deaf clubs left in this USA and why its extinct because of technologies? and video phone created? and then last - explained what is deaf clubs and why deaf people loves to go there? because of socialize  and etc

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? nope
 * Are images well-captioned? nope
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? no
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? no

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject? no
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject? no
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles? nope!!!
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable? nope! but could add it to deaf cultures' page? in one of their section?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? i think this article has a lot of potential.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? umm
 * How can the content added be improved? a lot -- if you read all of my feedbacks !