User:AquaticBanana/Draft:Blind Photography/EmptyGallonofMilk Peer Review

NOTE FROM COURSE INSTRUCTOR: I agree that this article is really coming together. I agree that a history section would be good. And I think that a big piece missing here - in relation to both the history and the separate sections - are examples of the artists and, ideally, the work of those artists. They are definitely missing from this overall, even though there are sporadic notes. I'd also mention, for the section on smartphones, that Google introduced a feature in their Pixel 7 that is supposed to help visually impaired people line up their selfies in the frame - maybe not exactly relevant, but I would argue moreso than some of the Apple features you meniton.

https://www.cnet.com/tech/mobile/pixel-7-makes-taking-selfies-easier-for-blind-low-vision-users/

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I like the 4 categories you present for your article! Would placing a History section benefit the article? The Types of Work Done By Blind Photographers could definitely incorporate some history, but as someone who’s genuinely excited / intrigued by the article you’re writing, I’d love to learn as much about the history of it as possible!

I like how your first and third sources are testimonials from blind photographers. The more of those you have, the better!

The second source is not only a great source for establishing a community within your article, but it’s a great source for actual pictures from blind photographers you can use throughout your article.

Highlighting “Blind Magazine” in your article is a great way to drive traffic to that Wikipedia page (if they have one?)

All in all, you cover most if not all of your bases here! Don’t shy away from the history of this art form; presenting the photographers in chronological order can help a lot with that!

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