User:Archaeologycheesewiz/R12/Lachain Peer Review

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Give an explanation or translation of Centro Veneto di Studi Classici e Orientali

In the excavation section, connect a couple sentences with some commas; the short sentences get a little repetitive.

Under Grave contents:


 * “After the person was placed in the grave, they filled the grave with silt or small pebbles”, specify who they is.
 * “Direction of the body was aligned with the cardinal directions.” Which directions were favored, if any? Maybe reword - “The placements of the bodies were aligned with cardinal directions” so you don’t use the word directions twice.
 * “It appears that when new graves were dug, they cut into older graves.” Once again, specify they.
 * The graves often contained pottery, tools, bone spatulas, AND mammal bone perforators. Add and, or as well as, or whatevs.
 * Children were buried with furniture or distinctive signs of family. Was it specifically one or the other, or both?
 * These children seem to have had the same treatment as adults. Specify in what way they were the same - especially since it was just stated that children were buried with different grave goods.
 * This is a sign that status is attributed at birth. Maybe reword to maintain a little more neutrality; “this evidence suggests,” or “(Specific Scholar) theorizes,” etc.

Pottery


 * The pottery was decorated and then smoother and polished - spelling or grammar mistake, smoothed?
 * This was caused by oxidation or reduction processes - maybe a brief sentence explanation of this?
 * There is evidence that the pottery was not made for only funerary purposes. Reword, you give evidence in the next sentence; maybe, “Pottery was not only made for funerary purposes”.
 * These bowls were mainly hemispherical and were either restricted (47%) or unrestricted (32.5%). What does restricted or unrestricted mean? Brief description might help the average reader (e.g., me)
 * Hyperlink to carination
 * Maybe explain or link to what calciform is.

Jewelry


 * Ochre beads had the most specialized production because they are the most regular in measurement. - Maybe reword, “The ochre beads found at the site are the most regular is measurement, suggesting a specialized production.”
 * Similar necklaces have been found at other Neolithic cemeteries in Nubia and Sudan. Which sites? Maybe link to them?
 * In the intro section, you state that there are “a few examples” of stone lip and ear plugs, and then under Stone jewelry state that they were among the most common stone jewelry.

Lithic Tools


 * Geometrics were the most common tool type found and are made from the finest raw materials. What are geometrics?
 * You have Other stone tools as its own category, separate from Lithic tools. I would suggest making Lithic Tools the heading, and then having a separate heading for the information under that, and then have Other Lithic Tools another subheading under Lithic tools.

Other Lithic Tools


 * Hyperlink to adze.
 * This possibly means that mace-heads have a social context and may only be associated with men or children. Maybe reword to “This could possibly mean that...”

Animal Remains


 * You have bovids and cattle as separate sub-headings. Cattle are bovids, yes?
 * Having more male cattle skulls shows the possibility of male cattle being symbols of prosperity, prestige, and power. A common reason for more male cattle bones being found could be attributed to slaughtering them; female cattle could produce milk and were therefore valuable, while males could contribute nothing but meat. Is anything mentioned in the research about this?
 * Link to bird species in the Birds category.
 * Link or define to culm

I would suggest changing the layout of your information. Climate/environment might better be placed towards the beginning.

You might want to reconsider the title of Gebel Ramlah, perhaps something like Dental study or biological relations or something.

If there are any pictures of the site, you could include those, or pictures of lithic tools.

In general, there is a good amount of information, sources seem good. Intro seems to include all of the relevant information.