User:Archaeologyslay/Tomb of Horemheb in Saqqara/ImplicitPandemonium Peer Review

General info
Archaeologyslay
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Archaeologyslay/Tomb of Horemheb in Saqqara
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Tomb of Horemheb in Saqqara

Evaluate the drafted changes
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My biggest critique of your article is that all of your information is just bullet points. I saw you said you have/had Covid so I understand. I think all the information that you've gathered is good. Some of the points are very good and others are short and less descriptive. I think those points can either be expanded upon or shifted around. These could use more depth in the explanations behind the points themselves how they are relevant and how they are important to the article overall. I think if the information was formatted and ordered well that article itself will be good and more informative than it originally was. Another criticism I have is your references. You only use one reference which does lead us to having a limited view into the subject but that could just be due to an absence of reliable sources. If you can find more and varied sources I think that would help. Overall what you have is good and it's clear you've done good research.