User:ArcheoAguila/Practice theory/JamesZD online Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?ArcheoAguila


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:ArcheoAguila/Practice theory
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Practice theory
 * Practice theory

Evaluate the drafted changes
It looks like you have a great start here! Some reorganization would be helpful, and probably a little expansion on a few key ideas.

Lead:

The Lead section overall looks good, but some clarification on the sentence "These underlying, deeply embedded structures govern all human societies." would be useful. Is that your assertion, the structuralist assertion, or the practice theory assertion?

Content:

History and Premise

In the Lead it says that Practice theory was developed as a reaction to the Structuralist school. It would be good to expand on that in the "History" part of this section, before diving directly in to Pierre Bourdieu's work. Right now it looks like Pierre Bourdieu is the beginning and the end of practice theory.

It might also be good to break the "Premise" section out into a different paragraph from the "History." I'm imagining somewhere around "Bourdieu's theory of practice sets up..." This sets it up so you (or others) could easily add to both the History and the Premise sections and guides the reader who wants to learn about the history of practice theory to a different place than the one who wants to read about what Practice theory is.

Habitus is fundamental enough it probably deserves a section heading all its own to describe what it is (linking to Habitus (sociology)) and how it relates to practice theory specifically

I wonder if listing key terms is the best way to convey information about these terms. It leaves me wondering how these terms are put together in practice theory. (which might be addressed by expanding the "Premise" section?).

I'm also curious about why you made some of the changes you made from the original article. For example, you removed competencies, intellect, style of speech, and dress as examples of cultural capital. Are those not instructive examples?

You also use the word "dialectical" without defining it, which may be too jargony for the "encyclopedia style"

Organization:

I think my biggest suggestion would be to try to move away from the organization around individuals, to more of an organization around fields and/or key ideas in practice theory.

For example, since Sherry Ortner, Anthony Giddens, Pierre Bourdieu, etc all have their own pages already, the focus could be about Practice theory in their work, rather than around the individuals themselves. So instead of "Sherry Ortner", the subheading could be "Practice theory in Anthropology", and then talk about the work of Sherry Ortner and other Anthropologists using practice theory. Same with sociologists and Anthony Giddens. This provides a guide to readers looking specifically for Anth/Soc practice theory work, and to future editors about where expansion would be useful (adding more anthropologists/sociologists). This way, both of these sections could also come under the "Influence" header, rather than being set apart.

General editing:

This is just a draft, so no shame in still finishing out the edits, but just make sure you don't lose track of them before transferring it over to the final article. There are a lot of (I still need to link all the references) and "I'm going to add more sentences here" etc. Wikipedia doesn't seem to provide a good way for me to mark them, so I'll just list a few (non-exhaustive list) here

"Algerian culture and its internal laws in the effort to of the conflict." missing word?

Still have (find page #) in Bourdieu section

Missing link to main article in Communities of practice and learning as practice.

Great start and good luck as you round it out for the semester! Let me know if you have any questions or want me to read through it again sometime!