User:Ard1228/Peter Pan syndrome/Paola Rios L Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) Ard1228
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Ard1228/Peter Pan syndrome

Lead[edit]
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead evaluation:
The article has been updated with new content and information. The first sentence of the paragraph describes the article's topic. Yes, as I was reviewing the article a notice it includes some information and details that weren't present in the past article. It's a little bit detail at some point. But it gathers important information. The lead paragraph gathers and gives important information about the peter pan syndrome, which I found very interesting.

Content[edit]
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics?

Content evaluation:
The content is relevant to the topic and it's added up-to-date as I see down below at the references. Of course, if you see the article is missing information, but as she has develop her own work is has provident important topics and information. The content that she has provide for this article is very on point with the topic.

Tone and Balance[edit]
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation:
The content that is provided on the article is very neutral. Some viewpoints of the article are presented very wisely. The content that it's added convinces the reader and it provides new knowledge. It doesn't attempt to pursue the reader in favor of one position.

Sources and References[edit]
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation:
There is a medical and metal health source that is reliable and back ups the information. Yes, all three of the sources are recent. I check and they work and provide the information that she has given.

Organization[edit]
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation:

 * The third viewpoint is a little hard to read, but it very develop. There is a few grammar errors or ways to point out that interferes with the tone, just like "... it’s considered to be the anxiety one feels while entering the new chapter", I would give her the advice to change it to "it's considered to be the anxiety some feel while entering the new chapter". It could be more divided and presented into major topics and minor topics of the article, because the information that's given it's very precise and true. I look forward to him continuing to work and developing his ideas at work, which up to now have interested me a lot and educated me. Excellent job!