User:Areleah/Obol (coin)/Floccinaucinihilipilification1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Areleah


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Areleah/Obol_(coin)?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Obol (coin)

Lead

 * The Lead is unchanged and summarizes the main components of the article.

Content

 * New content is useful as it adds information on a bronze piece as well as a description of the Athenian Obol.
 * Perhaps add when the Obol first started appearing.
 * Who was Plutarch?
 * Who are some of the archaeologists who describe the iron spits as "utensil-money?"
 * Mayhap state some of the cities where the obol was divided into twelve coppers.
 * Maybe talk about some of the other designs that obols had in other regions.
 * Peradventure where obols have been found by archaeologists?
 * Have obols been found outside of Greece do to trade?
 * How were these coins minted? In what cities or locations were they made?

Suggested Changes

 * The dating system BC is used as well as BCE. Consider using only one of these.
 * Consider changing "while six obols make a drachma" to "six obols made a drachma."
 * Consider changing "Ephorus on his work On Inventions" to "Ephorus in his work On Inventions."
 * Consider changing "Plutarch states the Spartans" to "Plutarch states that the Spartans."



Tone and Balance

 * The tone does not try to manipulate the reader and is balanced.

Sources and References

 * New sources are a little dated.
 * Links for all sources are working.

Organization

 * Article is well organized into different sections.

Images and Media

 * New image is used as a visual for the article. I would suggest adding the date of the coinage to the image description.