User:Areyes12/Positive youth development/Shafataryan Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Areyes12


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Areyes12/Positive youth development
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Positive youth development

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Has the lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? - I don't think the lead was included in the edits of this draft.

Content

Is the added content relevant to the topic? - Yes, the topic seems relevant as it concerns information about benefits of interventions for at-risk youth who belong to ethnic minority groups. However, the bulk of the edited text seems to focus on youth-development interventions in general rather than specific interventions about ethnic minorities.

Is the added content up-to-date? - Yes, it's sourced from a 2018 research article.

Does the article address one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it discuss topics related to historically underrepresented populations? - Yes, it does. By observing at-risk youth, it directly addresses an underrepresented populations - at-risk youth.

Tone and Balance

Is the added content neutral in tone? - The tone is neutral over the entire draft, an attempts to present information about the impacts of intervention.

Are there overrepresented or underrepresented viewpoints? - There doesn't seem to be any particular viewpoint that is being pushed.

Sources and References

1 hyper-lined source from 2018. An academic article, also seems to be from a reputable journal.

Organization

Is the added content well-written, concise, clear, and easy to read? - Yes, it's easy to read, and follow. It could potentially be improved if examples of such interventions were focused on impacts on ethnic minorities.

Does the added content contain any grammatical or spelling errors? - The first couple of sentences both begin with 'Due to ...', one of them could be changed so that teh phrase doesn't seem repetitive.

Is the added content well-organized, broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? - Yes, it's well organized. Additionally, the first mention Positive Youth Development could be followed by "(PYD)", since that acronym is later used in the draft.

Overall impressions

Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?/How can the content added be improved? - The information certainly seems useful and informative and could possibly be improved by including cases that specifically target ethnic minorities.

What are the strengths of the content added? - A big strength of this draft is in its informative nature- PYDs are mentioned, and then their importance/impacts are discussed.