User:Argoncarbon/Triplet-triplet annihilation/Whishhper Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Argoncarbon


 * Link to draft you're reviewing

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Argoncarbon/Triplet-triplet_annihilation?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Triplet-triplet annihilation

Lead

 * The introductory sentence in the lead clearly describes the article topic
 * Longer statements in the original article are now broken into shorter, easier-to-read sentences
 * The lead as a whole was concise and more inviting to read than the original
 * "This mechanism is related to the Dexter energy transfer mechanism"
 * How are the mechanisms related? Does one involve the other? Are they just similar?
 * (Minor) "Triplet-triplet annihilation was first discovered ... to explain ... delayed fluorescence in anthracene derivatives"
 * This sentence gives the section an abrupt ending, and it feels disconnected from the rest of the lead
 * Consider rephrasing or creating a separate History / Early Mentions section

Content

 * All the new content is relevant and has information that readers searching for this topic would likely be interested in
 * Factors for efficient triplet-triplet annihilation upconversion (TTA-UC)
 * TTA-UC applications
 * All the new content is up-to-date, new sources being from the 2000s
 * Some content from the original article has been rewritten and is now easier for general audiences to read
 * Breaking up run-on sentences
 * Removing awkward phrasing
 * Appears to have more of a step-by-step flow

Tone and Balance

 * The content in the article is still neutral, consisting of explanatory writing
 * There is not really a "position" to take on this topic
 * If there are any known limitations to the applications of this mechanism, then that would be a possible "opposing viewpoint"

Sources and References

 * All the new sources are reliable and have working links
 * The content accurately reflects the information these sources provide
 * One of the new sources are a bit older, but still within the 2000s (Source 2: 2008)
 * The other two new sources are from the past two years (Source 9: 2021 Source 10: 2022)
 * There is a more diverse range of authors than before
 * Quite a few are from Parker C. A., but at least all of them are only supporting one claim

Organization

 * The content is easier to digest than before
 * The content is well-organized, with major points broken down into their own sections
 * There is a huge gap of whitespace between the lead and Photo upconversion that can be removed
 * Applications
 * Either change the header name to "Triplet-triplet annihilation upconversion applications" or move into Photo upconversion
 * The header formatting, as it is, tells readers that this section discusses TTA applications rather than TTA-UC applications
 * Photo upconversion - "Two triplet excited emitters then can undergo triplet-triplet annihilation to produce ..."
 * change to "can then"

Images and Media

 * Separating the concepts from the single image in the original article was a good idea
 * It's less chaotic and easier to follow what is going on in the diagrams
 * The captions are very descriptive compared to before
 * Images adhere to copyright regulations
 * The images now appear in close proximity to the section that discusses the corresponding concept
 * The width of the second images can decrease to the same as the first image
 * I think this will make the text to the left more appealing to look at
 * If image-size is a worry, readers can click on the image to enlarge it

Overall impressions

 * The overall quality of the article has definitely improved
 * The new content provided details that made the topic as a whole easier to understand
 * I think the image presentation in the article was the most significantly improved
 * I couldn't tell what was going on in the original article image
 * The old caption was weak to begin with as well
 * The new images are more straightforward and the captions do an excellent job clarifying any possible confusion