User:Ariel.Gman/LGBT history in Brazil/MahHdz01 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ariel.Gman


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ariel.Gman/LGBT history in Brazil


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * LGBT history in Brazil

Evaluate the drafted changes
There aren't any changes to the Lead Section, but because of the format of the article I don't think it's necessary. Having bullet points makes it so that there aren't major additions that need to be adjusted for in comparison to what's already there.

All the content makes sense and is appropriate for the subject matter. There is definitely a content gap for LGBT people in history and Latin American history, and these changes help fill those gaps.

All the information seems accurate and neutral. If planning on adding the cultural impact of Fresas y Chocolate, just make sure to cite sources that back up what the specific impact is.

The sources are all reliable and from journals, and are all relatively recent.

The grammar is all good, this section could possibly be rewritten if needed. "Journalist reviews perceived David and Diego’s affection towards one another as means of a friendship, this is understandable, but it goes against what the director may have wanted the audience to see or comprehend. That two men can love each other more than that of friends."

I think these are really great additions to the article. I think the bullet point system makes sense and makes what could be a very dense article feel very readable. I can see the benefits to switching to paragraph form but overall I think that the current format is fine. I also think the additions to the article really contribute and help fill in gaps in the knowledge. If you would want to make any changes, it seems like a lot of the additions focus on media, so you could possibly look for social movements or political issues.