User:Ariel.Gman/LGBT history in Brazil/PlushKangaroo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ariel.Gman


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ariel.Gman/LGBT_history_in_Brazil?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * LGBT history in Brazil

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

The lead in the original article states that the page is intended to be an overview of LGBT history in Brazil, therefore I do not think a new lead is needed.

If you were interested in adding more to the lead i would maybe briefly touch on the major moments OR explain when same sex marriage was passed in Brazil (something like that).

Content

I like how you are keeping up with the bullet points that the previous article had.

Much of what you are adding seems to be corrections to dates and misinformation, which is super helpful and assists the article.

The few bullet points near the bottom go into more detail about why these films are held in such high regard within the LGBT community, which i adore! I wish this article allowed you to expand upon things like this easier.

Tone and Balance

Your tone matches that of the original article.

Everything is easy to read and comprehend.

The article as a whole holds a neutral stance on the topic in question and does not seem heavily biased in anyway.

Sources and References

The sources are relevant to the article and are used correctly within the article.

The sources you have found also are correcting incorrect information found in the original article which is extremely beneficial.

Organization

Everything was concise and fits in with the original article perfectly.

I did not notice any spelling or grammatical errors within the information you are adding to the article.

Images and Media

Unfortunately the original article does not leave much room for images and media which is such a shame. If you are able to find some images that would tie into some of the bullet points in the article that could be another helpful tool for the Wikipedia page.

Overall Impressions

It is clear that you are trying to follow the original article format, which you are doing successfully might I add.

I love that you have found incorrect information within the original article that you have been able to fix due to the sources you are using.

Overall it is obvious to me that you know what direction you are heading with this article. Keep working hard and have a great day!