User:Ariel.Gman/LGBT history in Brazil/Powderskiing1921 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ariel.Gman


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ariel.Gman/LGBT_history_in_Brazil?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * LGBT history in Brazil

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content:


 * All the new content is relevant and up to date. Since the article is about LGBT history in Brazil, it deals with equity gaps.

Tone:


 * The new additions are presented in a neutral way that does not show bias.

Sources:


 * The sources are current and seem thorough. All of the added content is backed up by these sources.

Organization:


 * I think the bullet point style works for this article, especially since it discusses many examples over a span of many years. That being said, if there are areas you feel like could be expanded, I see no issue in adding some sentences under a specific bullet point.

Images/Media


 * The existing article does not have any images, but if you find relevant ones they could be a nice addition.

Overall Impressions:


 * I think all of the additions are welcome ones, and the errors you fixed will help create a clearer picture of the topic. I would just double check the existing article for grammar. I found under the 1995 bullet, "The bill is pending approval in the House since 1995." it could be changed to "the bill has been pending..." or something else that gets the same message across. Overall I think you on the right track.