User:ArielleTLevy/Israel–Libya relations/Aikedumanwen Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ArielleTLevy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ArielleTLevy/Israel%E2%80%93Libya_relations?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Israel–Libya relations

Evaluate the drafted changes
Firstly I want to point out to the added response that was given to the lead section of the article. It was interesting how you explained that the cause for the seizing of diplomatic relations between Israel and Libya has been due to differences about opinions on the State of Palestine. It definitely gives a reader a quick knowledge on the main basis guiding the Israel-Libyan relations. The naming of an important leader in the relations which is Muammar Gaddafi is also very vital as well as the link that was provided to his own page.

The overall approach to the article is also very brilliant although there are a few flaws I must point out to later. The initial article has a whole section on "History" with no sub sections but in your draft, it has been broken down to different time periods like the 1967 post relations and other relevant sub sections. Also it gives much more details on Gaddafi himself and his large role in shaping relations between both nations.

The addition of about seven more images to the article makes it much more visual and real. It definitely makes the article relatable to people as they can visualize people or events that have happened in the past. A possible challenge is that there is no image that was given to show the present period of events in the Israel-Libya relations. And also the fact that the images were of the people directly involved on this relationship rather than just pictures of the maps of the respective countries is very commendable.

Another flaw I see in the whole draft is the fact that it is written very much in the perspective of Libya. It seems most of the relations between both nations was stemming a lot from Gaddafi or from Libya in general. There hasn't been an equal attention given to how people of Israel or the Israeli government handled the relations between both nations. I think it is worth acknowledging their input in the relationship to avoid it being very one sided.

The sources which are used in this draft are on average very recent with a lot of them having publishing dates in 2023. Even those with publishing dates back in the 20th century, it is great to see that those sources are used to support info that happened in the 20th century. Also it was a very exhaustive list of sources as it had more than twenty new sources than what the original article had and they were directly relevant to the topic at hand.

Another issue i have is the inclusion of Egypt largely in the relationship. While it is important to note that Egypt played a huge role, I believe it would have been better to also associate nations that played a huge role but on the Israeli side like the US in this article. This contributes to it being fairly balanced. If not, then it might have been a bit irrelevant to add such extensive information of Egypt in an article that is mainly focused on Israel-Libya relations.

But in general I think you've done an excellent job of the draft of the article and it has generally added better quality to the original article.

I hope to see how well your article turns out and I wish you the very best!