User:Arielleb02/Oak Street/MariiMarii28 Peer Review

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Arielleb02


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I like dhow your introduction told us about where the street is, how to get there, and what's on it. However, the tone of this article is not neutral. your descriptive words are giving the article a positive biased tone, almost like your trying to persuade people how Wonderfull and excited the street is. Instead of trying to sound like your trying to sell this street to readers, should include how popular the street is and how many tourist go to this street to experience it's shops, restaurants, and beauty. The overall format and organization of your article is great! I feel like there could be more research done about the street and the shops and restaurants that are there. In addition the flow of the article is not there due to the repetition of the word Oak Street in the beginning of each sentence. However, adding the table of contents is a nice addition to the articles overall look. Although, this article could use some pictures to show the beauty you describe and also an info box. However, your content is well organized and your citations are done correctly. Your sources are also reliable and the links for each of them work. Overall its a good star to a great article!