User:Aristatertotle/Independence of Brazil/TM-307 Peer Review

General info
(Stephen)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Aristatertotle/Independence of Brazil - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Brazilian War of Independence - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Though the lead has not seemed to have been altered it seems to me that it seemed to me a serviceable enough job, but funnily enough It seems like the article did not state the direct outcome and consequences of the conflict like similar articles, that being Brazil's existence of an Independant nation of Brazil, though I suppose that could be inferred from the title or the fact that Brazil in the first sentence is labeled the "newly independent Brazilian Empire".

When it comes to the neutral body writing maintains what I'd consider a neutral tone neural tone while providing a more detailed account of events or completing important pieces of information such as in the first body paragraph, though I do think withdrew or fled might be terms meant in place of surrender, in said paragraph.

Seems like a good start has been made on the original article's apparent lack of citation, and it looks like the sources used are relevant to the topic, but it might also be worth saying that the article might benefit from some more recent works as it seems those used are over two decades old. Though it seems like the organization of the article seems fine as is in its order to me at least.

Overall, I would say this is a good first chunk in fixing an original article. in which the most apparent flaws are the lack of citation and its bare detail in places.