User:ArloOkem/Lazo Marsh-North East Comox Wildlife Management Area/Eclarim Peer Review

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ArloOkem, RibsWiki18
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User:ArloOkem/Lazo Marsh-North East Comox Wildlife Management Area - Wikipedia Lazo Marsh-North East Comox Wildlife Management Area - Wikipedia
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I liked that your lead was concise and contains brief information of how your park was established. It wasn't so heavy to read that I was able to gather few information about your park but your body had more information followed by your lead which was good. I can see that your draft includes information of boundaries, species, information about visitors, historical use and the creation of the area. The "History" section of your draft had nice flow of information where it wasn't divided into random facts of sentences. It would've been nicer if other sections of the draft would do the same. For example, your geography and ecosystem section was broken into separate sentences which just seemed like you guys were throwing some random facts about the place. I wish there were further detail on those parts. However there weren't any places where it was difficult to understand and the tone was appropriate for the article. You guys also used a lot of sources which was paired into each sentences into in-text citations so as a reader it was more believable that your information was accurate. I can see that your article page doesn't have much information rather than the boundaries of the park which seemed like it was also written by you guys. So it would be good to include any information you guys have in the draft. I liked that it wasn't too much information that the article got heavy to read and the topics were nicely aligned so the flow of the article was generally good. Since you used different sources, the all relevant perspective was included.