User:Armaanismail/Tajikistan and the World Bank/Gpp105 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Armaanismail


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Armaanismail/Tajikistan and the World Bank


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tajikistan and the World Bank

Lead
The lead section is updated appropriately.

Content:
It would be helpful to elaborate on the last paragraph. Perhaps provide some examples of the publications.

You discussed briefly about the NDS, perhaps you can expand on that section already present in the article.

The original article already has a section on the IFC, careful not to overlap unless you are planning to change that whole section.

Tone and Balance
Change "protecting" to "protect" in this sentence "After the economic shock between 2008 and 2014, which affected Tajikistan through lower prices for export commodities and reduced remittances, The World Bank invested in the country to promote income generation opportunities and protecting the poorest households in the rural regions."

Consider changing "accessed" to "available" in this sentence "...agriculture, and health, to improve the quality of services accessed by the population."

I would avoid using language like "aim to support" and "aim to promote" because it isn't indicative of whether it has actually made any progress in these areas. Its better to say whether it supports or doesn't support. This language sounds like an advertisement.

Consider changing this sentence "World Bank has greatly invested in research to understand Tajikistan concerning its development experiences and share it with advisory and analytical services." to "The World Bank has greatly invested in research concerning Tajikistan's development experiences and shares it with advisory and analytical services

In this sentence "Since 2000, over 100 publications have been produced in Tajikistan." perhaps elaborate on what they regard.

Sources and References:
Make sure to include citations for each claim.

Your references are very current and from a diverse and educated background.

Organization
Consider separating your body into sections with section headers.

There are one or two grammatical things to fix as elaborated above.