User:Aroddy1/Sex and drugs/YamilBar Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Aroddy1)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Aroddy1/Sex and drugs


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * User:Aroddy1/Sex and drugs

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: The lead, while informative of the history of sex and drugs, is well written but is not a definition or description of the topic. It also makes claims that are proven false within the same article (i.e "Both legal, and illegal, consumption of drugs and their effects on human body encompass all aspects of sex... According to some studies, up to 22.1% of teenagers abused substances during their most recent sexual experience."). It also could use some cleaning up in clearing mistakes in grammar and redundancies ("Drug use can have many effects on an individual; namely physiological and physiological effects to the user."). It has the potential to be a very good and interesting article however, with lots of information and relevance.

Content: The content is very well put together and encompasses both the pros and cons of drug integration into the sexual experiences of people.

Tone: My only critique of the tone was that some sentences feel opinionated or biased but I am certain its just a grammatical or vernacular misinterpretation.

References: The references and sources section is not only extremely dense but also thoroughly curated, most links worked for me and I can see they are valid sources.

Overall Impressions: I feel that it has all the makings of a good traditional wikipedia article with only a few minor issues holding it down but if the tone were to be more neutral and the text were cleaned up a bit, it could be a very informative read.