User:Arojas251/Pearl C. Hsiung/Sarai1021 Peer Review

Peer review for Pearl C. Hsuing

Under “Biography “:

- First sentence: after “1973” add “and” then remove “living and” to make a compound sentence.

- Third sentence: change “art work” to “artwork” and add a comma after that word

- Last sentence: add a linked article to the word “surrealism”

- also the last sentence would actually go better under “Style & Artwork”

Under “Education”:

- 2nd sentence: remove the word “it”, looks accidentally placed

- 3rd sentence : there is an extra “in” that needs to be removed

- No cite on last sentence, if same as previous either add it or move the cite to the very last sentence so we know that it and the previous sentence share the same cite.

Under “Style & Artwork”:

- 3rd sentence: replace “(she)” with “(who)” it just sounds better and more consistent

- 4th: put comma after “up-bringing” for a better structured sentence

- Maybe link a photo to her painting “Power Chode Homina”

- Maybe link a definition to “fetid” since it’s not a common word

Under “Honors and Awards”

- remove random spacing

- no period or cite on last sentence

Under “Solo Exhibitions”

- very well done

- just a suggestion: link the exhibit to the title instead of putting the whole URL to the right but other than that I thought it was good

Overall:

- there were zero links you should have links everywhere

- was consistent and neutral

- putting “Solo Exhibitions” before “ Honors and Awards” would make it for a better read since there are no actual sentences when you write about her awards.

- you mentioned a lot of important stuff which is good but maybe add to those paragraphs to make them fuller if you can.