User:Arpierc1/Quantum mysticism/Lcwest Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Assigned to: Arpierc1, RAY of the SEA, Acarrol2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Arpierc1/Quantum mysticism
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Quantum mysticism

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Not Yet.


 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? No
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? Existing lede is lacking brief description of article's major sections

Guiding questions:

 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? No
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? Yes

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.) Yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes
 * Are the sources current? Yes
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? Yes
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) I think the collection of resources is thorough and reflects the topic accurately
 * Check a few links. Do they work? The links haven't been formatted into 'Reference List' template yet

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? Not that I noticed.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? It reads like an annotated bibliography more than a wiki article. However, it is noted that the summaries will be edited and formatted before going live.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? I think it will.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? I enjoyed reading about the various religious interpretations of 'what is' quantum mysticism . I love the correlation with quantum mechanics.
 * How can the content added be improved? I'm not sure the content needs to be improved. I do believe it will be easier to digest once it is reformatted into 'wiki article' style. I am excited to see the final product. Yall have done great work! :)

''' 'Mysticism' in Quantum Mechanics: The Forgotten Controversy: this subsection in particular is my personal fav. I'm not sure if you guys agree but, i believe the correlation to quantum theory's 'attention/intention' proposition is fascinating. Here are some articles you may find helpful or just want to scroll through to supplement current content.'''

https://isreview.org/issue/100/science-mysticism-and-metaphysical-chatter

http://quantum-mind.co.uk/theories/henry-stapp/attention-intention-and-will-in-quantum-physics/

https://www-physics.lbl.gov/~stapp/jcs.txt (this is the article that the link above addresses)

https://www.researchgate.net/publication/228505191_New_age_spirituality_quantum_mysticism_and_self-psychology_Changing_ourselves_from_the_inside_out

https://www.jstor.org/stable/284675?seq=1