User:Arse.Lupin/Women of All Red Nations/Frogskat Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Arse.Lupin and Dann.Devito


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Arse.Lupin/Women of All Red Nations
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Women of All Red Nations
 * Women of All Red Nations

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Good idea adding an imagine. Although I think the term "logo" would fit better than "symbol" as your description.

It was good to add the specification that the group is for Native American women's rights at the very beginning, compared to how it [the live article] is right now.

The placement of the 'Rapid City Conference" section is well placed, especially since it had been mentioned in the section above. It helps me as a reader know what happened at the conference to understand it's importance. You say "women were not allowed to be leaders in aim" - I think that should be explained. Traditionally, as well as historically, Native American women held powerful influence within their tribes. Why were they not allowed to lead in A.I.M? It doesn't has to be a lengthy explanation, but it would be good to add.

The "protests and political action" section was another good add. One thing I would change, unless you are planning on having more than one event under this section, I would rename the section to focus solely on the event with McCloud that you've already mentioned.