User:ArtT38k/Mosque lamp/Secrettoaster Peer Review

General info
(ArtT38k)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ArtT38k/Mosque_lamp?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Mosque lamp

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Lead: I see you revised the Lead from the original article to make it more clear. Your additions are thoughtful and make the flow of the Lead better, though I think you might consider leaving in the sentence that stated "The circular frames continue to be used in many mosques today, but with plain or frosted glass lamps for electric lighting" from the original article as it provides direct information that someone only skimming the Lead would want to see.

Content: Good addition to the article in the symbolism of light in Islam. It provides information to readers to assist them in understanding the subject better.

Tone and balance: You have a very neutral tone throughout the article, which is good. Sometimes the beginning of sentences are a bit repetitive, but not bad and can simply be a writing style.

Sources: Good sources and citations. I assume you are still working on them as some are missing some source information.

Organization: The article is in process so everything is still being worked on, but so far good organization.

Overall Impressions: Good article and interesting subject. I think you are quite well on your way to having a fully fledged draft. Good work.)