User:Arthistory9/Procession in St. Mark's Square/AWRlove Peer Review

Hello! Sorry this is so late-- I was unable to find your sandbox for the longest time, but I think that's just because Wikipedia is generally inaccessible and the opposite of user friendly!

Anyway, I think that your draft is fairly comprehensive. Your correction of grammatical errors from the previous article and addition of new sources is noted. With regard to sources, I think that your plan of citing Prof. Cranston's slides and lecture may not be the best of ideas; while it is certainly accessible to us and the course instructor, it would not be to a general Wikipedia audience. I would suggest that you attempt to find sources that present the same information. Given that much of the material you have attributed to the lecture has to do with the Myth of Venice, I think there are a plethora of articles and analyses from which you will be able to choose.

I would also suggest that you try and find sources for the "Description" section, just to be safe.

I think that your analysis section ia generally well-written, though I would try to add a but more material to it if you could find some. The last sentence, for example, is a tad jarring and I think that, while you could add hyperlinks that direct to another Wikipedia page, you should add more context to make it more easily understood for those unfamiliar with the layout of the piazza di San Marco or who do not know what a campanile is.

A great start that I'm sure will translate to a great published Wikipedia article!