User:Artylearner/Monument Lab/Josephrkopta Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Artylearner


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Artylearner/Monument_Lab


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Monument_Lab

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi, User:Artylearner! This is a really solid update to this article.

Lead
The lead is much improved the way that you've simplified it by removing the Mural Arts Program exhibition bit. I think it might benefit from an additional sentence stating where the program is hosted now (Penn).

Content
Question: where did the bit about the Mural Arts Program go? I don't think it should be deleted outright (and I think other Wikipedia editors would take issue with this), but you are right to move it out of the lead into a different section.

I think you're right to expand on the "Projects" section, which will only get better with time and additional work (not necessarily by you after our class is finished, but you've built a solid foundation upon which to expand.) Your establishment of a "Links to people and similar movement" section is interesting, and I appreciate what you're trying to do there, but I'm not sure how another Wikipedia editor might take it. What you could do is put this up on the Talk:Monument_Lab page, seeing what others think about this inclusion.

Monument Lab also has an extremely active Podcast program and they host academic conferences. Might those also go on this page?

Tone and Balance
You present the information in a fair and balanced way.

Sources and References
As I said when we met for a research consultation, sourcing will be challenging because as a newly established foundation there will not be lots of scholarly or peer-reviewed literature, so you're right to cite newsworthy journal articles.

Images and Media
This page would greatly benefit from images. The trick is to make sure that they are ones in the public domain. Next week's training module on "images and media" will be able to help with this.

Overall impressions
This is a solid and exciting article revision and expansion!