User:Aruizmontoya01/Donna Strickland/Chemistry Pink Lady Peer Review


 * I think that the page has good organization in terms of separating early life and education, then career, then activism. I think that it is a good way to separate each section to allow the information to flow.
 * I would suggest combining early life and education with personal life possibly or putting personal life as a subsection of early life and education because it breaks up the flow of the article
 * Also- you could add a few details about her personal life.
 * All of the information is relevant, but somewhat unclear (it could possibly be because I do not have a higher understanding of physics). Some of the words could be link to other pages, particularly in the science section, if they have them on wikipedia so the reader can go and read a particular part they do not understand then come back and continue reading the article about Donna Stickland.
 * The vocabulary used was difficult to follow- but again, I do not have a huge physics vocabulary
 * The "Activism" section could be seen as not neutral. Even though you do show quotes, I do not know if it should be included since she does not do any activism. It could come off as an attack on who she is as a person.
 * In the "Career" section I think that you could write a sentence about what she specifically did at each place she has worked.
 * You need citations
 * Overall, the information is there. I think you need to look at the previous author's language and sentence structure that they use and maybe tweak it a bit too flow better.