User:Arvisujt/Vilma Espín/Crowsarecool Peer Review

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Arvisujt
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Evaluate the drafted changes
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Early Life and Education

I think the addition here is good. It shows both the revolutionary side and daily side of her life. I think the sentence needs to be written more clearly. Specifically, it is not clear what the assault on the Moncada barracks is.

Role in the Federation of Cuban Women

Good addition of the distinction she made between feminism and her advocacy! I think it's an important distinction and also one of the main topics of discussion in the class. If there is any more examples from her life explaining her perspective, I think it would strengthen this even more.

Death and Legacy

The structure of the sentences could be improved. Specifically "Thousands of Cubans filed through the Plaza of the Revolution in Havana. Raúl Castro was in the receiving line. Fidel Castro did not attend." It is not clear to me when the thousands of people went to the Plaza. Was it following the announcement? Her funeral? Same for the sentences about Raul and Fidel. What is the receiving line? What did Fidel not attend?

"Espin founded the Frente Continental de Mujeres Contra la Intervención (Continental Women’s Front Against Intervention, FCMCI) [Torres Santana] and the Regional Center of the International Democratic Federation of Women for the Americas and Caribbean [FENTON]." Not saying it's wrong, but why is this under death and legacy if she did it while she was alive? Also, what do the FCMCI and Fenton do and why did she found them?

Role in the Cuban Government

Looks good

Family

Looks good