User:Arwynraine/Virginity/Emmsb Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
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Hey, I would see if you can find another source cause it just feels like their is not enough info rn (unless ofc the prof thinks its fine then just ignore this lol). I would proof read the bit that you do have, expecially with the asia section cause the last sentance is quite lengthy. Also, make sure you use the "cite" option in the top of the editting page to difrecly cite your sources. Other than that I love your topic!