User:Aschmidt32/Walter Dean Myers/AdyAsc Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * I am peer reviewing Aschmidt32 draft.
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: Walter Dean Meyers

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead evaluation
There is no lead to the article. The article begins with a major section titled, "Personal life."

I realize that there is a lead published to this article on Wikipedia. I also think that it could have been edited and expanded upon. Especially by integrating briefly the topics that will be discussed throughout the article like where Meyers grew up, who inspired him, and stating the volume of his work.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
The content added is relevant to the topic. I like that there was information added about Walter Dean Meyer's personal life, particularly the information about his childhood and adoption. It isn't clear who the Deans were, which is information that is missing. For example, were they a familial relation or was Walter in the system before being adopted by this couple? I also liked the addition of who inspired Meyers to write.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?

Tone and balance evaluation
The content added is neutral. It is informational and there is no tone of bias for one particular position over the other.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
There are secondary sources to back up a claim. For example, there are two sources that report on Walter Dean Meyers' death: Harper Collins and The School Library Journal. There are also secondary sources to convey the award information for his books. The most current source information is from 2014, which is the year of his death. There may be new information that is applicable and that in itself is a possible gap in research.

Link 4, 7, and 16, is broken.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Organization evaluation
The content is well-written. There are few places throughout the article where there are grammatical and syntax errors:

"...a part-German and part-Native American woman..."

^ instead of saying "part" rephrase by using "half" ?

"...and lashed out at those who teased him, a teacher urged him to use writing as a way better express himself."

"After leaving the army, Myers struggled with finding work and figuring out his purpose, this lead him to remember the advice given by his high school teacher and he began writing columns for men's magazines."

^ consider breaking these two complex sentences up into two simple sentences. Suggestion: "One of his teachers saw Meyers' struggle and urged him..."

Who asked this? --> "When asked what he valued most, he replied, 'My books. They were my only real friends growing up.'"

I see that there is a link to a source, but I think there needs to be a preface about the interview to have context.

"...that he was inspired to start writing about based on his own experiences growing up.

Suggestion: "Meyers was inspired by James Baldwin's work and began writing stories based on his own experiences growing up."

If there is a page on Wikipedia about Sonny's Blues and James Baldwin, I would link them for others to find. It will lead them to possibly discovering something new and spread awareness of this African-American writer.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Images and media evaluation
N/A

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

New Article Evaluation
N/A

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
Overall, I liked that the new content added gives readers more personal information about Meyers' life. These additions had a lot to do with time, which carefully outlines points of importance. I also really appreciated the additional content conveying Meyer's inspiration. The content added strengthens the article by contributing facts that were overlooked when originally published and edited by prior Wiki editors. I think that some aspects of the content could be improved by fixing small grammatical and mechanical errors. I've outlined a few above, under the organization evaluation. I would also suggest editing the current lead heading in the wiki article.