User:AshTheProtogen/Internet activism/Monsterinthevi 1 Peer Review

General info
AshTheProtogen
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:AshTheProtogen/Internet activism/Bibliography
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Evaluate the drafted changes
While reviewing my colleagues wikipedia entry, I noticed that they had no information in their sandbox draft. So all information in this peer review will be based on their bibliography. Firstly, in their first and second citation, they have errors regarding the date in the citations listed. The dates for the first and second citations are dated by almost a decade, I don't know how accurate they are anymore. They also have no summary of information regarding their third reference. Secondly, in their first reference, I believe that the tone of their citation is neutral and acceptable to publish. However, I think information that further supports their claim is important. Such as how can Internet Activism be used to control large firms by the public? Why are firms higher up more likely to be vulnerable to these attacks? How are these attacks so quick, coordinated, and accurate? Lastly, I believe that his second citation is a little biased. It strictly discusses China's actions towards internet activism. I think the article would be less biased if it also discussed internet activism in the Americas, Europe, Russia, etc. It also discusses Chinas "crush all dissidents style they had towards internet activism at first". Even if is true, I think it is biased, and needs further representation of that matter.