User:Ash Chollette/Ash-throated flycatcher/Zofiax13 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Ash Chollette)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ash%20Chollette/Ash-throated_flycatcher?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ash-throated flycatcher

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think it should definitely be under the conservation setting because it is less describing a natural behavioral pattern and more describing anthropogenic health disturbances in the bird.

Some formatting work could help like adding citations through the wiki "cite" button, so it's not in essay citation format.

I would elaborate to flesh out the additions and what it means in less scientific jargon. The middle sentence that has a lot of commas could be split into two sentences to improve layperson legibility.

"Increasing the amount of noise in the environment directly impacts their stress levels, decreasing their baseline corticosterone and increasing the acute stressor-induced corticosterone levels, especially in nestlings, birds that are unable to leave their nest"

could be split into

"Noise pollution decreases their baseline corticosterone and increases acute stressor-induced corticosterone levels. Nestlings are particularly sensitive to these stress hormones."

When it describes the decrease in listening range you could expand on what that means or why that's important. You could split that up and put that portion under the pre-existing "Vocalization" tab.