User:Ashemmasmith/African-American women in the civil rights movement/Delmyherz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

( Ashemmasmith, Jennyat, Joshua646, Squinto02)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ashemmasmith/African-American_women_in_the_civil_rights_movement?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * African-American women in the civil rights movement
 * African-American women in the civil rights movement

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The article that I reviewed, had long passages and had many opinions rather than stating what the article was about. The article that was peer reviewed, did have a better organization and passages that made it easier to read and comprehend. I do recommend making another paragraph to organize the structure of "African American Women Leaders", so that it is easier to recognize the leaders within that section. "Ella Mae Brayboy became the co-director of the voter registration drives sponsored by the Voter Education Project(VEP).Grace Hamilton was the first African American woman to be elected to the state legislature in the South. More women ran for political offices during this period of time, but they lacked attention due to the election of the first Black mayor, Maynard Jackson. May McLeod Bethune, a civil rights activist, made her voice heard, but was more subtle in how she did it. She seized every opportunity she could get her hands on to speak to the public about African American Civil rights. She spoke for women like Elizabeth Keckley, Frances E. Harper, Pauli Murray and Shirley Chisholm." There should be citations throughout, activist mentioned.