User:Asherm4802/Addiction psychology/Clancyelizabeth Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Asherm4802


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Asherm4802/Addiction_psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Addiction psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think you made a good choice in adding the American Society of Addiction Medicine's definition of addiction. I do wonder though, like Liz, if you could just paraphrase it rather than quoting. I did notice some things in the article that could be fixed. They are listed below:


 * The article seems to be a bit biased and uses some extreme language. I would take note of that and fix it where possible.
 * There is a lot of information about addiction rather than addiction psychology. I think the article would be more effective if a general background were given on addiction with reference to the Addiction article. This could be the sedge way into talking about addiction psychology, but would not overtake the article.
 * There are organization issues within the article. I think the sections could be arranged in a more coherent, flowing way.
 * The article lead does not reflect the contents of the whole article. It should represent the important parts of the article. For example, the lead does not even address addiction psychology or any practices within addiction psychology.

Good work so far!