User:Asherm4802/Addiction psychology/Khiggin1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(asherm4802)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Asherm4802/Addiction_psychology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Addiction psychology

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Asher! I like the parts that you have added so far to your article. Your leading phrases are helpful because they better introduce the topic of addiction models than the original article did. I agree with Dr. Rahn's edit about your initial leading sentence; it doesn't seem useful in the context of your topic. I think incorporating the definition of addiction and why you chose it would be a good beginning. I think that taking out the first sentence would help your article be more neutral as well. Overall, the organization of the article is also very easy to follow and has a balance of addressing what will be talked about and breaking the topics down into small explanations. I think in the next direction for your article, it might be helpful to expand on the two different kinds of addiction models. By elaborating on what you have already written and adding more sources that support the use of each model, I think you would strength your article.