User:Ashleighantrim2100/Blalock–Hanlon procedure/Kaitlynne.Chaffin Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ashleighantrim2100


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ashleighantrim2100/Blalock–Hanlon procedure


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Blalock–Hanlon procedure

Evaluate the drafted changes
After reviewing your article, I have a couple of things to point out. Your added content is very well written and is relevant to the topic. You had a lot of freedom with this since there was not much on the original article, and I think you have done a good job of making sure that you are organizing and communicating your information well. One thing that I did want to point out to you is that some parts could be interpreted as showing bias. When talking about the after effects of the procedure, make sure that the wording allows the reader to develop their own opinion and that it doesn't come off as pointing out the negatives. I clicked on a few of your links to sources and they took me right to the information that you used. I don't see any issues with your sourcing material, and I think you chose great places to pull your information from! I think it would be really cool if you inserted a photo of Blalock and Hanlon so that the readers can see who developed this medical procedure. Overall, I think you've done an excellent job. You started with not much to go on, and you have really made this article into something great! I think you're in a great position to continue adding content to your article. As I said, I think it would be useful to re-word some things in regard to the possible effects of the procedure. Other than that, good luck and keep up the good work!