User:Ashley.Galdamez/Community-based conservation/Galirin15 Peer Review

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(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

You should consider adding a couple introductory sentences to your article that detail what it will be about, the beginning of the article is a bit technical which would make it difficult for a new reader to understand. You can also benefit from simplifying the language a bit, try thinking about how you'd explain it to a friend in simple words and then modify the structure so it is not too informal.

In the second paragraph where you talk about the article and analysis it sounds a bit like a persuasive attempt, I would suggest that you avoid words like "could" or "can" when bringing up ideas from your sources.

Under the Ecological Impacts portion, you say that positive outcomes are evident because xyz, but instead of saying that you can say "this happened as a result of that" to avoid sounding persuasive.

Overall your article has good info just work on making it sound less argumentative.