User:AshleyMasse/Huacaya alpaca/Simone.eloise Peer Review

The author has added a lot of relevant information about Huacaya alpacas to their sandbox. The main article was significantly lacking in information that the author has expanded upon in their draft. There have been significant sources added to the article, a few of them are from further back (2005 and before), but as this article is not a developing subject, the older sources are not much of a problem.

The grammar in the page could be improved, as well as the flow. In the first paragraph, there a period missing, and throughout the article there is some room for readability improvement. For the most part, the edits are very well written! I really like your clarification on the fiber section. In the original article, the fiber section was confusing and didn't really help me learn anything, and your edits really helped me understand the background of alpaca fiber.

In your last section, you do have an uncited direct quote that needs to be addressed. It could be that the source at the end of the paragraph is the same as the quote, but you should really make sure that it is known the quote is from that source.

Overall, the information you plan on adding seems very relevant to the topic and seems like a great addition to Wikipedia!

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