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Chosen Article: Paracelsus
Partner: Kaitlyne Powers

Unifying Heaven and Earth: Essays in the History of Early Modern Cosmology: Paracelsus’ Ideas on the Heavens, Stars and Comets

Paracelsus: Medicine, Magic and Mission at the End of Time (2008)
Authors & Contributors: Webster, Charles (Author);

Publication Date: 2008

Changes:
Original: Paracelsus (1493/4 – 24 September 1541), born Theophrastus von Hohenheim (full name Philippus Aureolus Theophrastus Bombastus von Hohenheim ), was a Swiss physician, alchemist, and astrologer of the German Renaissance.

My Changes: Paracelsus(...;1493/1494...)...an alchemist, a lay theologian, and a philosopher ... He was not considered a cosmographer, a mathematician, or an astronomer.

My Notes:

- He was: a medical theorist, a practitioner, an alchemist, a lay theologian, and a philosopher

-He was not: an astronomer, cosmographer, or mathematician

Drafting into the philosophy section - Ashley
Although he did accept the concept of the four elements as water, air, fire, and earth, he saw them merely as a foundation for other properties on which to build.

Add to:
He often viewed fire as the Firmament that sat between air and water in the heavens. Paracelsus often uses an egg to help describe the elements. In his early model he claimed that air surrounded the world like an egg shell. The next element in his egg analogy is fire. Fire has a type of chaos to it that allows it to hold up earth and water, and this makes it like the egg white beneath the shell. The earth and water make up a globe which, in terms of the egg, is the yolk. In De Meteoris,Paracelsus says that the firmament is the heavens. He changes the way he thinks of the elements as his life goes on.

* maybe add a picture of the model to help make it easier to picture

Review by K8shep (talk) 14:48, 19 March 2020 (UTC)
1. What does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way? I don't see any changes here. Although, if your work was also integrated into Kaitlyne's you could go see the review I did in her sandbox. If you just haven't done any work yet, I do hope you'll get started soon. Your sources look really good, so if you still have access to them, please use them to do your additions/edits. 2. What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement? I'd just love to see some work here. 3. What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article? You have some notes above, so work on those a bit. Let me know how I can help.

Article Evaluation

 * Chosen Article: Gasparo Berti


 * Any thing distracted you: I found the little side note about Giovanni Battista Baliani writing a letter to Galileo Galilei a little distracting. It seems to be inputted there and I think there needs to be more of a connection to Berti.


 * Is the article neutral? Yes


 * Anything missing? The article says that he is best known for his work in math and physics, but it does not say what that work is. The only work that is mentioned is his work on the barometer. I think there needs to be more information on the other things that he worked on. It says that little is known about what else he did, but I think I would have to follow up on this more to be able to change anything. It also doesn't say much about his life other than where he was born and where he lived. I also think there should be more information on his mapping on the Roman catacombs.


 * Rated: Start-Class


 * WikiProjects that it is in the scope of: WikiProject Biography (low-importance), WikiProject Physics (low-importance)


 * Citations: I checked the links for the citations and they all work. I don't think they all came from good sources though. Some of the kinks don't seem to have a lot of information on him in general. Most of the links reference the history of the barometer and just mention him.


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