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 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? Yes I believe everything in the article is relevant, but it barely scratched the surface. The only thing that was distracting to me was the lack of information in this article.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? Yes, the article seems neutral in nature. Facts are really the only items represented in the article.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? If viewpoint implies different aspects of this article I believe there are many sub topics that are underrepresented, but nothing is overly represented either.
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 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added? Although I do not know a lot about the subject it does seem like some of the inforamtion is out of date or at least could use some substance with more recently published documents.
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Egyptian Medical Papyri
(The article we have chosen to work on because it lacks so much detail in explaining what exactly the papyrus is and why it is so important.)Ashtonnd33 (talk) 19:50, 14 March 2021 (UTC)

Edwin Smith Additions

The Edwin Smith papyri is of a great deal of importance because it changed medical practices, people were now learning that they could do surgery, whereas before they relied on more religious healing practices. Ashtonnd33 (talk) 19:50, 14 March 2021 (UTC)

Carlsberg Additions

The Carlsberg Papyrus sheds light on how women will conceive and weather or not they will conceive, using garlic. This garlic is used as an indicator once properly placed in the body of a woman. Ashtonnd33 (talk) 19:50, 14 March 2021 (UTC)

Kahun Additions

Kahun papyri is efficiently divided into three different sections. These sections are there to provide a guideline on the interaction between patient and physician. the first being what are the symptoms, the second being how the physician should consult the patient along with diagnoses, and lastly a treatment is offered or advised.

Peer Review by K8shep (talk) 19:39, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
This is a good start and you have a couple of things to add. I know we talked today and you were having trouble finding sources. For the Edwin Smith papyrus, you could look in the biography of James Breasted by Jeffrey Abt, called American Egyptologist. Also, take a look at the Caroline Ransom Williams correspondence I edited, called My Dear Miss Ransom. In it, there are letters back and forth about the Smith Papyrus and the context in which it came to be edited by Breasted.

You have also started googling, so I hope some of those sources help. When you're looking to add, think about what YOU would want to know about these papyri. Let me know how else i can help.

Response to Peer Review
Thank you for the review and I appreciate the feedback. I also appreciate your offering of sources I could try, I can look into them but I know for the article I am trying expand on the subsection of some of the papyri that are lacking adequate information, whereas the Edwin Smith Papyrus seems to be the biggest section, possibly because there is more information published on it specifically. I plan on utilizing all aspects to find new sources of information on some of the smaller sections of papyrus.Ashtonnd33 (talk) 16:28, 2 April 2021 (UTC)

Papyri History (for Egyptian Medical Papyri)
There is curiosity as to weather or not the the medical papyri was more progressive for the world of medicine at the time because of the reliance on non-physical treatments they still relied on. Spells were the earliest forms of medical treatments and believed to be effective before other methods were revealed. With this information it seems logical that physicians and those in the medical field who practiced medicine before surgery and prescription treatments were found effective could not completely abandon the earliest forms of treatments, such as spiritual or magical, but this does not entail a regressive approach to medicine. Some treatments did not require the assistance of alternative methods because they were found to be treated with only physical treatments, such as surgery, which is the focus of the Edwin Smith Papyrus. Ashtonnd33 (talk) 19:50, 14 March 2021 (UTC)