User:Ashylou04/Evaluate an Article

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Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
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I chose this because flowers are pretty, and it is an article that doesn't seem that daunting of a task to read. It also looks like it needs help.

Evaluate the article
The lead section of the article is quite bad, as it has one sentence that gives a single piece of background that doesn't mean anything, really. The lead section does not go over anything that the article does-- except that flower arrangement goes bad to ancient egypt, but nothing else. Since it is very short, there is no issue with it being too long, just short and sad.

The content in the article is relevant to the title, but most of the citations are more than 20 years old, so very dated. There could be more recent work about flower arrangements that don't date back to 1953. The article doesn't have much written about who did the arranging or modern day floral arrangements-- the word "florist" is not in the article, except as a "see more" type thing in the related articles section. There must be techniques that florists use or styles that would be popular at different times, like how furniture has modern, contemporary, art deco, etc.. The article focuses a lot on Europe and the time periods through Europe, and has a short blurb about ancient Egypt and China. But only the ancient periods, nothing about more modern history. The article has nothing about African countries or South American countries, which all have their own history, so there are things to be said about their floral arrangements. I know the article is titled "history of..." but there is definitely more history to floral arrangements more recently than the Victorian flower arrangements that were briefly mentioned.

There seems to be no bias in this article, there isn't really a side to pick about floral arrangements, unless they take the side of the flowers... which there is none of that The writing in this article is a bit rough, there are mistakes and odd unfinished sentences throughout. Some don't make sense or are hard to understand with wrong punctuation sprinkled throughout. The article is well organized, but just full of grammatical writing mistakes. There are two images on the wiki page, while they are both nice and visually appealing, there should be more images that show examples of the different flower arrangements of the different cultures mentioned. The captions are nice, the first one is just a description of the artwork, the second one has the description, along with an explanation of the time and art. The second picture is an artwork from the 1950s, yet on the article there is nothing about floral arrangements from the 1950s. This caption also doesn't go well with the article, talking about being representative of the french during the 50s, which does not matter for the history of flower arrangements. Both of the images contain women with flowers, but only the first image is a woman actually arranging flowers. I would add more pictures of floral arrangements or notable flowers throughout history that may have changed the way people decorated, perhaps a famous wedding.

This article doesn't seem to have any of the contributors talking to each other, and is apart of the wikiprojects history program, but is not rated. Overall, I think this article has potential, just no one really takes the time to do it up nice. It is under and poorly developed, with a few good sources and statements, but it is lacking in a lot of basic things a wiki needs, the lead section for example.