User:Asku7/Weddell seal/Malgam Peer Review

General info
Asku7
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Asku7/Weddell_seal/Malgam_Peer_Review&action=edit&section=2
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Asku7/Weddell_seal/Malgam_Peer_Review&action=edit&section=2#:~:text=hide-,Main%20page,-Contents

Evaluate the drafted changes
I would start off by introducing what it is that makes them unique and not such a broad statement. For example, Neonatal Weddell seals have utilize thermoregulatory stratagies such as the development of brown fat. Something along those lines or even more focused than that. The second sentence also sounds kind of broken because of the comma. Another way to reword this is: Brown fat is used in many species for thermoregulation however, pups are not born with this brown fat. Similarly with your other evidence I would just work on rewording it a little to make it more understandable. However you do present good information.